Since you're using death as a proper noun, you should capitalize it. It's interesting that Death is a tangible person with good emotions, though people who are alive shouldn't be able to see him, from my perspective.
Well see that's the thing which I will explain latter on normally people wouldn't be able to see him but because of gabby there is a change in death who he is and what he wants to do there for he can be seen ill go more in depth later on with the intro of the arch angel Michael
Just thought I should tell everyone (including you, Tristan) I will not be editing the next update. I shall let Tristan edit it and compare the differences.
Three days have past and death has not left the side of the little girl in the hospital bed. Suddenly the room goes cold and every thing freezes in time death stands slowly. The room vanishes around him and the room is filled with dark figures in a circle around him a light appears In deaths head a voice is heard "let us be known by the names the people have given us. Death." As he says deaths name a light shines down on him reviling him and his features to the people in the room. Deaths bare skull shown as reality and not a mask his hair hangs down over his ears his grey skin shadowed by the black veins in side it his red eyes glowing his scythe stabbed into the ground beside him. The voice continues "Anubis" a light shines over Anubis his head that of a dobermen's held high two Egyptian curved blades stabbed into the ground next to him upon lay gold armor and jewels. His black eyes watch death. "Mors" the light shines down on the gladiator his spear in the ground next to him his face hidden beneath his helmet his red eyes glowing through his pale skin only showing on hi right arm as his left arm was covered by the brass shield. "donn" a light shines onto donn his white skin shown through the deer hide he wore a large axe stabbed into the ground next to him on his head he wore the antlers of a dear upon his hood. "Hel" the light shines down on her no weapon lay near her she wore a long black dress four large horns came out of the back of her hair around to the front of her her long black gloves bore claws at the end her eyes yellow and her skin as pale as snow. "Kisin" the light shined down upon this Skelton large golden shoulder arm lay on him and a long whit leg coverings hung down from his hip bones a stone axe lay on the ground next to him. "Mara" the light shine down on the female monk her skin filled with color of life her orange robes fall upon her and her long black hair tied in a bun above her head. "Izanami-no-Mikoto" the light shines down on her her hair straight long black and messy her lose fitting dress revievling much she smiles her trickster smile. "Ogbunabali" the light shines down but seems to bend around him so nothing is scene but his out line and the dagger in the floor. "Shinigami" a young Japanese girl sits there on the floor her skin transparent her eyes reverse black and white no color on her at all she just sits there and watches. "And finally myself thanos." A light shines down on thanos his wings high in the air a sword in the ground by his side his robes falling down his body his hood covering his face except for his chin. Thanos' voice booms "I hear by call the court of death to order."
I didn't edit if because you were supposed to edit it. But you just posted it as it was. Which completely defeated the point...
"I did what I thought was right!" Death screams at Thanos, trying to make him see sense. "You did what you wanted. You betrayed your duties, and now the angels want your head." Thanos booms back. Anubis stands slowly. "Thanos, I agree with death on this matter. The angels have no right--" Thanos flys across the room, his sword pointed to Anubis' throat. "No right!? They have every right; they follow god. They have been in the divine presences--" Mors runs across the room, colliding with Thanos and sending him flying. He holds his spear in his hand at the ready. "God has not said a word in thousands of years! The angels know just as much as we do now. Thanos, even though you are the most powerful of us, that does not make you the leader. Now go. Take your place before Anubis cuts your head off." Anubis raises the curved blades in his hands, and Thanos stands and slowly returns to his spot. Mors returns to his too. "All in favor of continuing this judging of Death with me in charge say I." All but thanos and death say I. Mors looks at Death almost pitifully. "This meeting was called not because we wish to punish you, or wish to start a war with the angels. We are here to understand what you did. From what I understand you saved a life. The life of a little girl. You have also allowed people to see your appearance. As a part of the cycle, this goes against all we have ever been told. This breaks the cycle, but the world still stands, which means we do not know everything." Death rises slowly. "I implore you my brothers, sisters... And Thanos. Allow me to continue to watch over this little girl, so we might understand the meaning of the cycle and why I was able to save her." Thanos glares at Death, hate burning in his eyes. Mors smiles. "All in favor of allowing Death, the youngest of us all to lead us all to the light and show us the meaning of our existence say I." All but thanos say I. "All opposed?" Thanos opens his mouth, but closes it again with a scowl, knowing it is futile. Mors looks down at death. "Very well. You may watch over her, but be warned. The angels will come for you." Anubis stands quickly. "I pledge my sword. If they come for one of us, they declare war on all of us." Donn stands, and with a heavy Norse accent starts to speak. "Well, if that dog boy there will fight no one will leave Donn from the battle. My axe is yours." Hel licks her claw. "Sounds like fun. I'll be there." Kisin coughs up some dust and her jaw starts to move with a creak. "I may be old and dusty, but my boney old ass will be there with you too." Mara speaks slowly, as if she is deep in thought. "We are death, but I have always loved life... I will fight for the girl." Izanami-no-Mikoto doesn't move or care. Her skimpy dress hangs limply around her. "Death, I won't take part unless you are willing to meet my conditions." She licks her lips and smiles. Death says nothing and a look of hatefulness spreads on her face. Ogbunabali says nothing. He simply picks up his knife and slams it to his chest, showing a sure sign that he will help. Shinigami stands. The little girl giggles, sounding slightly manic with a disturbingly gleeful grin on her face. "I want to bathe in the blood of angels." Death smiles awkwardly at her, being afraid of his older sister as he always has, but knowing she will help. Thanos storms away saying nothing, and Izanami-no-Mikoto chases after him. They both vanish from the room. Mors steps into the center with Death. "We will wait. When we hear the call, we will come." Death blinks. Opening his eyes, he sees the hospital room. He looks over at Gabby, who is still asleep in the bed, and notices that no time has passed at all.