Please use paragraphs. Start a new one each time a different person speaks, or for organization purposes if you're adding emphasis, adding suspense, starting a new topic, etc. Keep going!
I'm gonna update tonight but I'm going through an even tougher time of my life. So it may reflect into my writing. Please be prepared if my writing isn't up to par
I'm sorry, I'm having family issues and friendship issues. I may have to update every other day. It's just too much stress. But I will update today
Ok, ok. It's super late here (or super early, depending on how you look at if) but I will update now. I will have my designated waller wall all of y'all lovely readers when she's awake. :3
Here I go. I'll try those paragraphs. ~~~~Love Troubles~~~~ Michael's POV I start walking along the streets to get to the parking lot where my cat was. I can't help but daydream about the wedding. A hospital wedding, yes. But a beautiful one all the same. Ally will be in white and her mother will give her away. While I will be dressed in a nice tuxedo and I guess Michael can be my best man. Ally starts making her way down the- "Hey!" I yell, as I see a man run away. Oh no... He just took the ring! I start running after the man, weaving between people, cars, and buildings. I eventually catch up to him and get his arm pinned behind his back. "Get offa me!" He demands. Wait a minute! That's a female voice... I pull the person's hat off to reveal a woman with startling gray eyes. She looks mean and vicious. I recover in time to take the ring box out of her hand and back into my pocket "Hey, I need that!" She urgently says while starting to cry. I then realize she's not even a woman. She can only be about 14 years of age. I lean closer to her an whisper, "Now what would a young lady like you need to be stealing my soon-to-be bride's ring for?" That's when she breaks down. She completely gives up, falls to the ground. I carefully pick her up and carry her to a bench and she doesn't even try to complain. "Explain, please," I look at her kindly, but expectantly "Well I- I need a ring for my m-mom. She's supposed to be getting ma-married soon but both we and h-him are poor. We cannot afford a ring..." She looks down at the ground. "I'm sorry mister, I didn't r-realize I would be ruining your big day by making my m-moms happen..." I look at her thoughtfully. "Come on." "W-what?" She looks at me with wild eyes. "I said come on." I lead her back to the ring store and walk inside. "This little lady is looking for a low price wedding ring for her mom and the husband. Any help?" I ask the lady. "Hmm..." She sets out 4 rings. All priced below $100. "They're not so glamorous, but they're not pricey either." I gesture to the rings. The young girl picks one with a small pink stone. I pay the lady for the ring and lead the girl outside. "Now how about you tell me your name. I won't get you in trouble, I promise. But I think you owe me to be at my wedding" I say as I wink to her. She giggles and says "My name is Maria, but I go by Mary. You can find me at library. I'm there all the time." "Well alright then Mary. I have to be going, but I'll see you around." And I start walking away. "Wait! What's your name, Mister?" I turn back around. "My name is Michael." "Alright Michael. Ill see you soon, ey?" She looks at me with hope shining in her eyes. "Yeah, see you soon." I chuckle and start walking again. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ally's POV Michael walks in the door. I can tell he's anxious and been flustered. "Well hi there! I didn't expect you to be awake," he says as he walks in the door. "Oh yeah! I feel quite a bit better. Not so tired," I slowly sit up. "Just take it easy Love, don't exert yourself," he looks at me worriedly. I chuckle and lean to give him a hug. He hugs me back, then pulls away. "Where's Alex?" He says while looking around. "Oh, he had to go home and do laundry." I reply. "Ahh," Michael seems to be thinking of something. "Ugh..." I groan slightly. Head aches are horrible. "You ok?" Michael walks forward and asks, very concerned. "Yeah, just hit that button for me," I point to a small button on a remote. He hits it and more morphine shoot through. "I know I said I don't like morphine, but it's my happy juice," I say with a bit of sarcasm. "Alright Love. Rest up" he says, as he pulls the recliner closer to my bed and snuggles up into it. I hold his hand and we slowly drift off into sleep. --------------------------- Ehhhhhhh. Sorry, this must've been a really boring update. I had been halfway done and PimD crashed ,_, Just finished. Well, comment and leave helpful criticism. Thanks :3
This is a really good story, Cat. Gotta give it to you. Everything is flowing, another interesting update.
Man, I guess I should bump my own story /.\ I haven't been able to be on PimD lately. My iPod kept crashing whenever I opened an app. Over and over. I'll attempt to do a BIG update tonight.
Well shoot. Ill update tomorrow. I'm not very good with remembering stuff and my iPod is still bugging out a lot. I will try to make a super long update once I am home and settled back in.
I'm really sorry. I've been sick, having emotional problems, all sorts of crap. (Although only one person asked me about an update) I will be trying my hardest to write a big update. I'm not sure when, but I'm trying. I have to type it all at once; that's an issue. But I'm trying.
I swear, this is not going to die. I just can't update much anymore. I'm sick and I'm upset an I'm busy. But I'm trying.
Alright, now I really feel like a *****. So, I'm going to try to do as long as an update as I possibly can. (Which, with my luck it'll be super short ._.)