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Shelby crys into Tristan's cold chest as he father walks towards her "Shelby we have to cut that abomination out of you. Then.... Then you'll be my little girl forever." Shelby stops crying as she hears this. "you killed the man I love and now you threaten my baby and you except me to LAY THERE AND LET YOU KILL IT!!" she yells loudly. Her father dives at her and tackles her into a table he pins her down and raises the knife. Shelby punches him square in the nose and roles to her left at he stabs the knife into the table. Shelby punches him again breaking his nose. Then she kicks him in the groin and pushes him to the ground. She stands up and like her heel into his rib cage breaking two ribs. She pulls the knife out the table and stands over her father with the knife.
Shelby stands over her a tear roles down her cheek as she remembers everything. She remembers when she was 6 and she fell and broke her leg. Her father had carried from that spot in the woods all the way to the hospital. She remembers her 11th birthday when she sat at the table all alone. her cake lite up in the darkness. her dad had bought her 12 presents and made them all from random people so she would feel like some one cared about her but he had forgotten to sign one with his own name. So he went out that night and bought her a 13th gift. Then she remembered Tristan and the way loved her he made her happy And how her father had killed him for no reason tears rolled down her cheeks. she couldn't see any more. Her father grabs her leg and she's immediately thrown back to the present with one finally thought "he wants to kill my baby". She drops and stabs him in the knee. The blade slides in and out like butter. She stands up and looks down at him. "I'm leaving you alive Eric. Don't make me regret it." she stands up and walks up the stairs slowly. The blood dripping down her face. Eric looks up at her his knee bleeding his broken nose gushing blood he tries to Get up and he collapses to the ground. Shelby walks out side the night air drying the blood to her face. She walks to her car and drives away. A tear roles down her cheek as she does. She stops and puts a hand on her stomach "I will protect you now no matter what happens." After a few hours Eric manages to pull him self out to his car and drive to the hospital. he lays in his hospital bed "I will get my little girl back. No matter how long it takes." This is not the end of the story there is more to come
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