Well where do you wanna go? I asked. I dont know yet. Hey,Wyatt? Yea? Uh, you said we were just friends right? Yea. Well there a ride in the carnival called just friends,wanna go?
When we got to the ride the guide said"are you two dating? No, we arent. You will be after this. We walked past the creep that was talking to us. We got in and it was a video of us. It said to kiss. I kissed him on the cheek he turned red. The voice said the guy to kiss on the lips. He kissed me. I held him. It was to perfect to end. The next instruction was to kiss longer than a minute. He kissed me. I loved this ride. When the ride was over wyatt had my lipstick allover his face. I was giggling and couldn't stop.
I couldn't remember a damn thing I did yesterday because of my giggling. When we got home the lights were out cuz the needed to be fixed. It was dark out and no moon to help. As we tried to find each other in the dark I fell on him and my hair fell forward. The lights came on. I stared into his eyes. And he stared into mine.
Sarah, can I tell you something? I asked trying not to giggle. I was probaly drunk.yea sure.I'm in love with Wyatt.
Oh fuck, r u serious? Yea. Shit ur screwed. Why? I said as if i fucked someone. There was a silence. You had sex, didn't you? I was giggling.
Noo why? Sounds like it I'm coming to see. Thing is I didn't hear that and my window was open. She climbed in and watched us kiss
Wyatt stopped poked me in the back and said" turn around" sure enough there was more than Sarah. There was Luna William david and sarah. I scrambled along with Wyatt to get up. Sarah you just had to bring them. So does that mean when we invited to a sleepover you came to Amys house?!? Well we r having another one tonight do you two want to come? Sure! We said.
As we walked I noticed I was wearing my shirt with no shorts and the boys weren't wearing shirts. It made my face extremely red. And we were only 13. I had a huge crush on David. I planned on telling him before we finish the eighth grade.but Wyatt didn't know. I don't even know what to say about Wyatt. Sure we are best friends but he has been kissing me a lot more lately. I think I'll ask him tomorrow morning.
Uh, I must say, certain parts of this story was rather confusing. I usually am not too nit-picky about grammar and spelling...but when it gets to the point where the reader can't understand, that's rather bad. Grammar and spelling is very important in writing. Your story is missing " " to indicate it's a character speaking. You're also forgetting what makes up a sentence. A sentence can't be just, "Yeah." Theres also the fact your story is not really descriptive enough. It's not describing the surrounding, and setting of the story enough. You're also not describing the character's feelings enough. If it is a love story, as I guess with what you wrote, the character's feelings is key! A love story is only good when the reader can feel what the character is feeling. There's also the question of flow, which is missing a lot in the story. Some parts of your story does not make sense whatsoever. There's also your sentence structure. You should not rush into things by merely saying, "We went to the park holding hands." You should add more detail into it and write, "I felt his warm hands gripped mine in a comforting embrace that filled my chest with a warming sensation as we headed toward the park that was all the more inviting now than ever." That could be one way to fill a simple sentence with much more interesting detail that the reader might enjoy. Remember about grammar and spelling, descriptive wordplay, and sentence structure. It'll greatly improve your writing.
Ya I would read it, but the first phrase is, "I was lusting till the world ends" and I'm not a big fan of romance, but not many people write romance stories, so for that I thank you
I heard him shut something. I was in a tee shirt and panties. He turned on the light.there was enough space to look down. I looked and he was in shorts.
"why in the hell are we in here?" I asked. "just be quiet." is the last thing he said before he kissed me.