The Shining Desert scary

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011.

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  1. It's good, but it is slightly disorganized, and I don't really see how the story can blossom into having a plot, or characters.
     
    #21 *shot_down (01), Jul 16, 2011
  2. This is just describing a place that can be used for another story this'll give you a background on those stories
     
    #22 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  3. I'm actually gunna make a story with a plot for this, then you'll fully understand that story
     
    #23 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  4. You need to create a plot and characters. You're good a describing, so put it to good use. At this point, it doesn't look like you're going anywhere with this. And don't use second person.
     
    #24 *kayleeann2327 (01), Jul 16, 2011
  5. Read something like the intro to "The Dunwich Horror" and you'll understand my inspiration
     
    #25 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  6. This is mainly information on a house. It can be used for more stories, this is just a big intro
     
    #26 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  7. Just do what they say and ppl will like it. The reason u have no comments is because there's no ot whatsoever and no charas!!!
     
    #27 *CheekyChloe (01), Jul 16, 2011
  8. Making another story with all that on characters needed!!!! thread no one volunteered
     
    #28 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  9. Nvm makin new one
     
    #29 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  10. It's called characters wanted submit ideas as soon as you can
     
    #30 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  11. I think I'm the only one that gets that this is simply an intro and that it's just for a description of the houses history and what happens to people who wander to far into it's depths
     
    #31 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  12. This is just simply amazing, it felt like I was actually there. Most stories like this doesn't have that affect! Well done!
     
    #32 HEXIN, Jul 16, 2011
  13. Thank you! Someone actually understood the point!!!
     
    #33 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
  14. Lol
     
    #34 HEXIN, Jul 16, 2011
  15. PPL Read the Dunwich horror and you'll see my inspiration!!!
     
    #35 SantaClues, Jul 16, 2011
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