Don't write in role play form. Use quotation marks, and don't put stars around actions. This is a story.
Leave him alone. He works hard on this. Can't you see? A lot of people haven't complained. And then YOU show up. Really?
Hmm, I love how you claim to know everything. "It's a story" lulz... Here is what it is: Role-Play and a story had a baby, and this is it. :| If the majority want me to do quotation marks and no *s, then I will.
-Curacao Blue- Mike: Uhhh Mr Chair: Now! You are going to go to that academy, and with this new-found powers of yours, you can easily ace your classes. After the school year, we destroy the academy. Mike: My eyes! They burn! Mr Chair: devil's eyes? only had 1 man that survived, and I could barely kill him. Mike: Let me go! Mr Chair: No... -Unknown Infinity- Panda: Come with me Logan. Logan: *follows panda* Panda: I don't know how you managed to win, but to obtain the power, i'll have to put a tatoo of a star somewhere on your body. The bigger the star, the stronger your powers increase, but it'll hurt more also. Logan: Put it on my back. Panda: *Grabs huge needle* *sticks logan in the back* Logan: So what happenes to my body? Panda: You'll grow 3 inches taller, and your muscle size and strength will increase by 500%. Logan: Will I go crazy? Panda: I don't know. We've only had 1 that went crazy. Logan: Who? Panda: Mr Chair... -Echelon- Buddy: Well, i'm going to study. Gonzo: We've got a huge selection of books, i'm sure you'll gain more knowledge here. Buddy: So... What if I just skip The academy classes? Gonzo: since you passed the test, all you have to do is do 1 club mission a day. Buddy: Ok. I'll drop out of the academy then. -Sex Bob-Omb- Hermes: The only person who knew 5 was casp. Congrats! Casp: So what do I get? Hermes: Well, you're part of the noble 4 of your year. They get special privileges. --- As always keep it snazzy.
Well, I want him to get better at writing. Don't get all mad at me for saying advice. A good writer WANTS criticism, because they know that's the only way to get better at writing.
I know johny, I was wanting to get an update done quick, i'll have a longer one tommorow to even it out.
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(Side note, a "dash" in this story is like moving so fast, it's almost like teleporting) *The next day* Mike: I feel... Like i'm not even in control of my actions... Mr Chair: Hehehe... Go to school, and blow shit up. Mike: Errmm... Ok... *Mike arrives late to class* Andy: Mike, you're late. 3 page report on why you were late at the end of class. Mike: *A demon-like grin appears on his face* and if I don't? Andy: You could be expelled. No clans would accept you either. Except for Curacao, but you didn't go to that clan. Nina: Yes he did... Andy: Leave this class Mike. You're are not welcome. Mike: Don't tell me what to do you fool. *Eyes turn solid red* Andy: Berk!!! Danzo!!! Vixen!!! Sophie!!! Jim!!! Help!! Danzo: What is it? *Glances at mike's eyes* *Body has a tint of red in it* *becomes paralyzed* Mike: *Dashes over to danzo* *knife of energy forms in his hand* Danzo: *Gets stabbed in the back, red tint gets absorbed into the knife, is loosing blood quickly* Mike: *energy knife becomes energy kantana* Danzo: Logan! Mike: Shut it noob! *dashes over to vixen* vixen: You better leave you asshole! *head gets cut off by energy kantana* mike: oh shit! Ya heads gone! PHANT: You son of a bitch... *points hand at mike* ... *hundreds of snowballs come flying out* Mike: Please... *As soon as the snowball touches mike, it melts* Berk: *dashes over to mike* *grabs mike by the neck* *throws mike out the window* Logan: let me settle this, I want to test this technique. Berk: If you say so... Logan: *jumps out of the window* Mike: hahahahaha... The new kid wants to fight me... *dashes behind logan* peek-a-boo! *swings kantana at logan* Logan: *catches kantana with his bear hands* Gahh! *grabs kantana out of mike's hands* *clenches fist around the handle* *Kantana breaks into a thousand pieces* Logan: *Absorbs the kantana pieces energy* Mike: *starts beating the crap out of logan with his fists and feet, pushing him back into a forest* Logan: *purple aura begins flowing around him* *purple spear forms in his hands* Mike: *red sword appears in his hands* *both mike and logan dash at the middle of the battlefield* *sword and spear clash* *purple and red energy go everywhere, destroying the forest, until it's just dirt and tree remainings* Mr Chair: your lucky I saved your ass, you almost died. --- Kind of a cliff hanger! Keep it snazzy!
New Characters: Kandy: Osun: --- Danzo: Go get... Logan... Berk: Sure! And where the hell is jim? Jim: I was in the middle of a movie with my students... Berk: Son of a bitch... You go get logan, i'm going to take danzo to the nurse. *heads to the nurse's office* Kandy: yes? Berk: Danzo was badly injured, can you heal him? Kandy: Sure *hand glows orange* ... *Slaps danzo across the face* Danzo: Ouch! What was that for? Kandy: For almost dying! -Jim's mini-adventure- Jim: I hope that brat is still alive... Danzo would be pissed if he died. Logan: Gahh... Help me dammit! Jim: *snaps fingers* *Jim puts logan in an illsuion* Logan: woahh! Why am I in a boxing arena? Osun: *a bird made of fire appears in his hand* *bird flies straight into Logan's chest* Logan: i'm too tired to fight back... I'll get you one day for sure though... Osun: My name is Osun... *Jim undoes illusion* Logan: What'd you do to me?!? Jim: Put you to sleep, ya brat! We're like a mile away from the academy. -Mr Chair and Mike's side/POV- Mike: How do I obtain more power?!? Mr Chair: The only way is to train, or kill Satin, but if you kill satin, you'll have 15 minutes and then everything in hell will turn to ice. Mike: Sounds easy enough... Will I obtain more demon parts? Mr Chair: Geez you have no common sense, when and if you kill him, you'll obtain EVERY demon part. Mike: I've already got two, and I feel so strong... I wonder what a full demon body will feel like. Mr Chair: T-TWO?!? Mike: Eyes and arm... *A big red arm much more muscular and longer than his other replaces his right arm* Mr Chair: What does it do then?!? Mike: Absorbs anyone i've killed energy... Mr Chair: You'll be one nasty mothafucka to deal with if you kill satin... --- Interesting... e.e Jim was slackin' off watchin' a movie?!? That bastard!! Keep it snazzy.