The Past and The Future It was a dull afternoon, as Taylor sucessfully dragged Sarah into the secluded vintage shop. "Come on. You promised." Taylor said, putting out her puppy-dog eyes. "You know what? I did and when Sarah Hamilton makes a promise, she doesn't break it." "That's the spirit!" Taylor thrusted her arm in the air, as Sarah rolled her eyes. Taylor attacked the dusty racks of vintage clothing, as Sarah surveyed the back of the shop. After a few minutes of probing, Taylor appeared beside Sarah and grabbed her arm, "You're right. This sucks. Time to go to Macy's." "We've only been here for 10 minutes." "Yeah, and that was all it took for me to tell that these fabrics will totally give you the itch. Trust me." Taylor winked, as Sarah ignored her, approaching the counter where a swanky yet shrude-looking lady appeared. An eerie feeling sunk into Sarah's stomach, looking up to the woman's hollow and unforgiving eyes. She simply couldn't pull away. There was something unusual about this woman but Sarah did not know what it was. Sarah shifted her gaze to the display, feeling a strong pull towards it. She couldn't take her eyes off of the shiny glass object. As she gently put it on her palm, a velvety voice startled her. "I'll give it to you for free." Sarah turned around only to reveal the woman, smiling up at her. "What? Oh, you mean the necklace? It's beautiful but I...I can't." Sarah stuttered, trying not to look at the woman. She noticed the distinctive and delicate carvings of the swirls, the perfect oblong shape of it and she could see her reflection through the locket's shine. "I insist. The locket was donated so it didn't cause me anything." The lady slowly walked up to Sarah, placing the locket into a leather pouch. "It's all yours." The lady said, as Sarah's stare broke to the sound of Taylor's voice. "Let's go S" Taylor sat in her Mercedes, putting on a touch of lip gloss. "Thank you, again." Sarah took a last look at the lady, as she exited the shop and hopped into Taylor's car. As the car engine roared, Sarah never took her eyes off of the shop and the strange lady who stood by the door. Hope it was "creepy" enough. I honestly didn't know how to make it creepy. Please leave comments, suggestions and HONEST criticisms below
Hahahahaha, I would give criticism but I'm sleepy and my brain isn't functioning normally. I'll tell you tomorrow if I think of anything.
The Past and The Future Despite her perfect life, Sarah was not the one to believe in fairytales. To her, they were down-right predictable. She knew that not everything had a happy ending and that she would be prepared for it. But Sarah did not put that into thought when she saw herself in the mirror, showcasing a golden ball gown that flowed down to her feet, bringing more attention to the crystal locket hanging around her neck. Or when Chase Michaels showed up at her house at exactly 8 o'clock sharp and told her that she looked ravishing when they swayed to the music on the dancefloor. Even when Sarah took center stage with Chase, receiving her first homecoming crown and when he passionately kissed her goodnight on her front porch, still she did not put her denial of a happy ending into thought. Yes, those all sounded like fairytales. Predictable and all the same. Now Sarah stood there in front of the mirror, smiling to herself as she remembered all that had happened that night and how it had felt like to be in a perfect story. She reached up, fumbling with her necklace. She stared at it for a moment but was surprised when she heard a clicking sound. The pocket opened, revealing a code mechanism with 4 numbers already on it. 2007 "Wow." Sarah whispered, inspecting it closely. Without thinking, Sarah had the instinct to push the golden button on the side. All of sudden, the room was filled with a blinding light, as Sarah covered her eyes, clutching the locket. She couldn't feel her body, seeing that it was slowly separating into tiny pieces like she could see herself frozen in time. In only a second, she was being transported. She was no longer in her room, no longer staring at her beautiful reflection. She was falling, falling into a pit of darkness. Then it stopped. She knew she had landed, feeling a soft material through her hands. Somehow, the place felt familiar to her. She then knew that she was in some sort of a ranch. She could easily smell the horrid stench of the muddied pigs and the unbathed animals. Although she couldn't see anything, she knew she was sitting on a haystack as she stood up and tried to find her way in the darkness. Soon enough, she felt a wooden door and pushed it, finally seeing the moon light and the stars in the sky shine through. Sarah was frightened by the sudden sound coming from the rooster. She decided that it was dawn and everybody had just woken up in time to see her. It all seemed so familiar to her. Sarah searched her brain for something, for a certain memory. Then she remembered... This used to be her grandparent's farm and she had lived here 5 years ago right after her father had died. Sarah had been transported to 2007. ----------------------------------------- Yeah, I know not my best. I worked really hard and long on this update even though I don't really like it BUT I home you guys liked it Please leave comments, suggestions and criticisms below
Okay, guys would it be better if it wasn't Author's POV cuz honestly, I'm kinda hating it now cuz I'm bad with it. I'd rather do Sarah's POV. Please vote and give a reasonable reason
You're doing great, Joyce! It's getting more and more interesting. I really like the concept. I personally think that an Author's POV would be good, but I believe that Sarah's POV would be better. It would be much more interesting, I think, to know the main character's thoughts. That's my opinion anyway. It's okay if you would not consider it.
THANKS YEEU SO MUCH Eliza I really appreciate it and I'm seriously going to take your opinion into consideration.