The Mystery Girl

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Dj_Comet, Jan 16, 2013.

  1. Sorry it took so long, Basketball kinda took over

    Emily's POV
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    "DIED?!" was all that could come out of Maddison's mouth.

    "Shhh, shes not dead "dead" but Aaron doesn't like me to talk about it." I looked over at Aaron to see if he heard her, but luckily he didn't. "Okay this is how it all went down.

    FlashBack
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    It was two days before school ended our 5th grade year of being students. Aaron and Alex were laughing their asses off with a girl named, Chey'enne. This girl was also in 5th grade, she had black hair to her shoulders, brown eyes and she was considered a fighting genius. We were walking home and with us was Chey'enne and her brother Karl, he was a grade above us with short black hair that almost covered his eyes which were light brown.

    "You little kids ready for summer?" Karl asked. Chey'enne and Alex just responded with a simple yes but Aaron and his monkey face responded, "I'm not little." Everybody started laughing, and then we stopped where wr usually split up to go home.

    Alex, Aaron and I went down one street but then we heard tire screeching and a scream. I looked at Aaron and Alex, their faces were showing fear like they already knew what happened. They sped off towards that direction where the sounds came from I was slower than
     
  2. Sorry CONTINUED
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    Than them. Aaron and Alex were standing still when I got there, and when I finally saw I understood why. The ground was painted by blood and Chey'enne was unconcious by a car. The boys faces were covered in tears but Aaron finally moved and put dog tags he had gotten from dad in her hands.

    "Sorry Chey'enne I couldn't keep my promise to keep you safe." Aaron was bawling the most out of everyone.

    Present
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    "What happened after that?"Maddison asked kinda teary eyed. Before I could answer, Alex and Aaron walked between us and said "Thats enough pain for today."
     
  3. Awww sad update when u can!!!
     
  4. Really sad but really good!!!
     
  5. This got really good . Nice job!!! And bump 
     
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  7. I'll update tonight, ok?
     
  8. UPDATE!
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    I just stood there staring at Emily, I couldn't believe she told the new girl. "How much did she tell you?" I asked Maddison.

    "Sh… she didn't say much, just how your friend got hit by a car." She looked at me as if she was searching for any emotions, she turned away disappointed.

    I turned my attention from Maddison and back to Emily, "How could you tell her, you don't even know her." Emily started to get mad, "I don't know who you think you're talking to, if you remember I'm older, little brother.

    Her calling me little made me frustrated since she's shorter than me, "only by nine months, shorty!" Before the argument could go any further Alex tapped me on my shoulder, " hey its almost time for practice, lets go." I calmed down and nodded, Emily also calmed down. I thought of a question and asked Maddisn, "Who are you exactly to come at the end of the semester?"

    Emily was going to say something but Maddison's reply seemed to shock her, "It would be best not to know, sunshine." I got to admit that was kinda funny, but that bothered answer bothered me, "So by knowing I could die?" I cracked a little joke but I could've sworn she mumbled under her breath, "Its not a could, you will die.
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    Whats this?! Is she going to kill him?! w
     
  9. Srry if its not as good as the others I'll redo if its not
     
  10. Nice job dont change it