The mistake

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Oox-Zoe-xoO, Apr 28, 2011.

  1. .........
     
  2. YAY!!!! the italics worked 
     
  3. Ahh.. I don't like that scary ending .. "your best friend keena" :lol:
     
  4. And Awesomly Awesome Sister, Jessie, That is Awesome
     
  5. Tempz is a ledge. Standard.

    Miss the dick tho :(
     
  6. o_O dealing drugs now? You can go to jail for that.
     
  7. Lol she murdered multiple times too!!! She can go to jail for a lot of things!!!
     
  8. This sounds a little like GTA Chinatown wars
     
  9. ... update!!!
     
  10. GTA! 

    Update!!!!!!!
     
  11. No ! Its more of a "UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
     
  12. I know u do babe 
     
  13. Keena was thrown Into a dimly lit room, she lay there on the floor curled up in a ball shivering "now listen here and listen good" a guy said kicking keena out of her ball so she could look at him "were going to keep you here as our little........ Pet? Shall we say" the man laughed evilly and kicked keena once again in the stomach
    "TEMPZ!!" Conner roared from outside the door, the guy who was presumably tempz scowled and shouted back
    "WHAT BRUV?! I was just scaring this skank"
    "I don't care get your ass in here now!"
    Tempz looked down at keena who had curled back into a ball and laughed again as he spat on her

    Keena heard the door slam behind her before she started sobbing softly to herself, she should have ran off with jess, at least jess was safe
    "p-p-please D-d-don't c-c-cry keena" a voice mumbled from the shadows
    Keena relaxed a little, she knew that voice.... "Andy?" she asked hopefully
    "yes its me"
    "where are you? I can't see you its too dark in here"
    "just follow my voice ok?"
    "ok, god what happened to you? Are you ok?" keena asked as she followed the sound of andy's humming slowly
    "yes I'm fine, I've just been shot, had much worse"
    Keena eventually found andy sitting in the corner surrounded by blankets "oh my god, your not ok babe, far from it"
    Andy kissed keenas forehead "honestly i am fine, you look much worse"
    Keena ignored the much worse comment "who did this to you??"
    "oh er that girl, you know the one who's all lovey dovey with Conner"
    Keena's heart stopped beating almost, she couldn't have done this no way... "do you mean....... Zoe?"
    Andy clicked his fingers "YES! that's her name, you know her?"
     
  14. ANDY!!!!!!!!!
    the dude kicked me...!
     
  15. HE's ALIVE!!!!!!!! Lol , good good :lol:
     
  16. Lul





    He would do that...
     
  17. I flung the door open angrily and looked around the dimly lit room "KEENA!!!! GET YOUR BUTT INFRONT OF ME NOW! I KNOW YOUR IN HERE" I screamed loudly into the room acting angry with keena even though I wasn't, I waited for a minute for keena to show her self but she never did "EITHER YOU SHOW YOURSELF OR I WILL SHOOT AROUND THIS ROOM UNTIL A BULLET HITS YOU" I grabbed my gun from my waist band and held it in my hand showing that I wasn't pretending even though secretly I was. I could never be mad at my best friend no matter how hard I tried. Still there was no keena "I'm going to count to
    3 and if your still not here I will shoot" I held the gun up in the air "1.......2....."
    "I'm here" a weak timid voice mumbled crawling forward
    I smirked "ah good girl" I crouched down as keena collapsed at my feet, she had been here for at least a week already and this was the first time i had been allowed to seen her. Her normally full and bouncy hair was now greasy, limp and lifeless, her clothes were hanging off her frail body. She looked dead.

    I felt my eyes welling up as I looked into keena's eyes. I had learnt over the years to make my eyes instantly dry at any sign of emotion that would make me cry.