I should have said that yesterday. Me and Kira have come up with the title! Well, it was mostly Kira. ᎯᎡᎦᏫᏪ ᏫᏪ ᎦᎬᏉᎬᏪᎢᎻ ᎯᏉᎬᏪᏌᎬ
I'll let someone else do it. I'm a bit blank these days so maybe after a few more chapters i'll contribute.
I would, but I'm kind of confused as to what's happening. The twin part bewildered me. Is it an actual twin, or simply her reflection…? And why is she jumping off the building…?
It's just her reflection in the mirror. She's not jumping of the building, she is merely jumping onto the fire escape and running away to her burnt down home in the dead of the night instead of taking the much more convenient route of the door in broad daylight.
It's kind of short, but the best I could do. ~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~ Ashes. Everything was ashes. Stephanie carefully picked her way through the rubble, her heart getting heavier and heavier with each step in what was once her home. The piles of soot had a light dusting of snow on them, and it seemed almost a miracle that the flakes weren't tainted with black. But no, she thought bitterly. It wasn't a miracle. There's no such thing as a miracle. The moon was full, casting a glistening silvery light onto the wreckage. Just enough for Stephanie to see by. Then she spotted it. A slightly charred black briefcase, her dad's work company engraved in intricate, golden letters. Frantically, Stephanie snatched it from the ground, desperate for something-anything-from her past life. From what her life could have been without the fire. She turned it on its side, expecting to see BW in the same looping font. Bryan Wicke. But the initials weren't her father's. ~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~<>~ 0.0 A little bit of a cliffhanger there. I started to narrow down the arsonist a little, since no one else felt like it.
Wow...this story took pretty long to start...from page 1-5..theres no story..its all bout who wants in and etc..then the story starts off well and yet gets interupted...and it only has 4-5 short updates=___=" Tash if i may suggest,maybe you should close this thread and repost 1)with thread tittle. 2)with updatesthat way,people wont give up on trying to look for updates and wont get lost with the story.the idea of collaborating is awesomegood job writters
Yes, but if I do that this thread will become pointless, the people who posted the updates would have to post them again, and others who read it wouldn't understand why so many different people are posting. And the same thing would probably happen. There would be breaks in the story where people want to join in, or volunteer for writing next. Plus, I would have to do my really long explanation thingy again... But I'm hoping that updates will become more frequent so there's less of a gap between updates. Maybe one update per page or two pages. Now, who would like to update next?