The Last Samuri

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Percyous, Jul 5, 2012.

  1. I bit into a large piece of meat and indulged myself in eating, I didn't want to be there but I would still take advantage of the situation. I suddenly felt something gently tugging my traditional black samauri kamino, I relized it was Julena and looked up. When I looked up I saw the entire tablefull of people staring at me astounded, I put my focus back on my plate and continued eating.
     
  2. I sat back in my chair feeling full and wiped my mouth, I then heard lots of stomechs growling, I looked at the other guests and relized none of them had eaten more than one piece of meat then at the platter that should have had leftovers. "Well, let's just talk then." said the head of the Uchorok clan Julena rested her head on my shoulder as the geusts began to chat among themselves, the conversation soon turned to the Uchorok's wealth. "So, what do you think about the Kurisaki clan?" someone asked
     
  3. "Ha! Those fools were complete and total idiots, our ninjas were much better than thier samauri, they didn't deserve thier wealth!" I immediatly grew interested and sat up straight. "Oh really?" I said "Yeah! Their samauri were wiped out by us in mere minutes, those cowards tried to run and beggd for thier lives and gave up one another, especially their head, he was on his knees trying to bargain for his life." "I have heard all I wanted to. Julena, I am not sorry about doing this, I was only here because your brother threatened my brother, but now I can kill him and your father, along with your whole clan." Before anyone could move I was standing on the table both of the gaurds laying dead behind the the clan's lease as I stood with my katanas in execution position around his neck. "Aizen Tamoro! What are you doing?" Avenging the Kurisakis." "This will mean war with your clan!" "Too late, you already killed them." "What??????" "I am not Aizen Tamoro, I am Aizen, heir and last surviving member of the Kurisaki clan! Now die you lier and coward! I will take your head as a trophy!" I yelled savagly as I swung my katanas.
     
  4. I stoped my katanas a centermeter from his neck and walked over to Cojon , "Cojon Uchorok! I hereby challenge you to a dual to the death, starting now." As soon as I finished I swung downward and broke the chair where he had been sitting in half and cracked the marble floors. "Ha! Dumb samauri can't even hi... Agh!" He was taunting from his position hanging in the rafters until I sliced his stomech, as he lay motionless on the floor I finished him off. "An Heir for an Heir, if you want to avenge him take it out on me, I will not be answering if you come calling to the Tamoro's home, From now on I am a Kurisaki!" I yelled as I walked away from the dumbfounded geusts and left the estate, blood, bodies and ruins wherever I walked.
     
  5. As I sat in my room aboard the ship I meditaded and found I didn't regret my descision. It had been a year since I had left the Tamoros behind with a bag full of money I had been given and two katanas I had made myself two months ago. I never stayed in one place too long but I never left the country, I was looking for a place to rebuild my clan.
     
  6. "Pirates!" the cry interupted my meditation and in an instant I was on the deck of the ship ready to defend, that's when I relized they were one of the most feared crews there ever was or will be, thier name was then Kin Pirates, living up to thier name they were richer than the shogun and almost as much as the emperess most likely, I knew what to do, but first, "Captian! If I can single handedly rake care of these pirates will you give yourself, ship and crew along wih anything on it to me?" The captian had no choice, the Kin pirates never took prisoners, unlease they were near a slave region, we were on the opposite side of the nation. "Yes! I will!" "Good." I drew my weopons and approached thier captian, "Captian Kin! I challenge you to a fight for your ship, crew, land, riches, servaces, and anything else you own or have aboard your ship or property!"
     
  7. The captian could either say no and look weak or agree and fight, he chose the latter. As we fought we fought out weopons blazed as we both fought like demons, but I soon found his weakness and his fighting pattern, he was an easy opponnt, I spared his life, but I took everything I was promised, I made out like a emperor, as we sailed towards thier lands each person was given a rank and job, I kept the position of second in command open, but the Kin pirates were disbanded, thieer land was the perfect place to rebuild my clan, from then on there were no Kins, only Kurisakis.
     
  8. It had been five months since my clan's restorment, the new clan members I had gotten from the ships were called the original Kurisakis, all of thier familys had joined my clan and others came in hopes to join, but were turned away, many other clans willfully came under Kurisaki control. As we fortified our lands and strengthened our soilders and elationes I waited for the Uchoroks to come, and one day I was proven correct in my suspicions. We had grown back to the spot of number one clan and that angered the Uchoroks even more, they one day came with thier full army, luckily I always kept a very big amount of scouts outside of our lands on the lookout for marching soilders. Once they were reported to me our gates were closed to our city and citizens were moved into bunkers as we prepared to fight.
     
  9. Did I add too much violence?
     
  10. Thank you for your comments and critisisms!
     
  11. "Captian! Wake up!" my eyes flashed open to see the cabin boy trying to wake me. I tried to shake the dream away, it had only been one month, and I hadn't made the pirates part of my clan, we simply made a new flag and formed a new crew. We were now the Kurisaki Pirates, for the flag I drew two Katanas in place of the bones and a samauri's helm for the skull, the dream of wealth for my clan had been what I hoped, but they had no land and I found that I liked sailing more than staying still, so we sailed. As I walked onto the deck one of the pirates yelled "Captian on deck!" as soon as the words began to leave his mouth everyone in sight stopped what they were doing stood straight and saluted "Get back to work!" I yelled which was my way of saying at ease. I took my place at the helm and looked through my telescope. "Prepare to land!" I yelled as we aproached the shoreline, as I walked to my cabin to change my clothes there was a bustling all around me with the crew changing into kaminos and raising the sails and replacing them with regular ones, like them standing at attention when I walked on deck this was something new introduced by me, as I changed into some armour and got off the ship with two gaurds with me and my hand resting on my top katana I thought to myself, I'm home.
     
  12. Please give me any ideas you have, I want to make this enjoyable for readers by doing things they would like done.
     
  13. I turned back to the woman and helped her up, "What is your name miss?" I asked her "I am Katashe, and who are you kind sir?" "I am Aizen" I replied then asked seeing my chance "May I treat you to dinner miss Katashe?" "Sure, I would like that, Aizen. " "Ok then, meet me here in two hours, choose any place and we will go there." "Ok, see you here in two hours!" she said waving as she walked away. "I watched her until she was almost out of sight and motioned for one of my gaurds to follow her and keep her out of trouble. The other gaurd stayed with me as I reached the Tamoro house and walked up to the gate, giving the message "I'm home" to Mr.Tamoro, it was time to reunite with my family.
     
  14. I turned back to the woman and helped her up, "What is your name miss?" I asked her "I am Katashe, and who are you kind sir?" "I am Aizen" I replied then asked seeing my chance "May I treat you to dinner miss Katashe?" "Sure, I would like that, Aizen. " "Ok then, meet me here in two hours, choose any place and we will go there." "Ok, see you here in two hours!" she said waving as she walked away. "I watched her until she was almost out of sight and motioned for one of my gaurds to follow her and keep her out of trouble. The other gaurd stayed with me as I reached the Tamoro house and walked up to the gate, giving the message "I'm home" to Mr.Tamoro, it was time to reunite with my family.
     
  15. I was taken to the guest room with my gaurd with me as we waited for Mr.Tamoro, when I was begining to think I had been forgoten the door was opened and in stepped a young man I guessed to be about 19 that looked a little like Shinjiko, except he was more muscular and taller than I ever thought Shunjiko could be, but as I studied his face more I heard him say "Welcome back brother!"
     
  16. I am thinking about making a superhero story like this one, what do you guys think?
     
  17. dude you are really good at sticking with your story!!! Nice job!!!
     
  18. Why thank you very much I try,
     
  19. Plz vote on the new story, yes or no.