The Empty Story

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Akimoto_Komachi (01), Aug 22, 2011.

  1. sorry ignore that
     
  2. Great it had to go to 5th page so now it looks like I'm pointing to an number
     
  3. I said I write update in 20min but I never did. Sorry! Will update now 
     
  4. So lonelyguess no one likes my story but wtf i'm gonna post an update anyway
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    She winked at me and gave me the look that said to act.

    I gaped at her before shutting my mouth.

    Just then my new mother came in to the room.

    "Why are you looking so shocked? It's only natural that I adopt you sister as well since I want to adopt you!" she spoke so cheerfully.

    "Thank you!" I said with true gratitude.

    Reanne mouthed that she would explain everything to me later.

    I sat down on the dining room table and got to learn everyone. My mother was called Anna, my father was called Lucifer and I had a step-sister called Nikki who was fourteen. I smiled at my new family. Everyone was so nice and warm ready to accept me and Reanne into their family.

    I ate the most delicious thing at dinner. It was called ssss...sausaa..sausage! I loved it to bits!

    After I finished Dinner I nearly flew upstairs with Reanne.

    As soon as I closed the door of my bedroom I glared at Reanne.
    I loved her of course. Insanely. I was just angry that she hadn't come to me sooner.

    "Hey, hey don't look at me like that I just got back from that stinking prison today!" she said

    I continued glaring at her.

    "Hermes got me out of prison. He must have a crush on you~~!" she said teasingly

    "Really? Hermes? I didn't know he was the kind type.." I mewed

    "Anyway I got back from the prison and went to Arania and heard that you had been given permission to live a normal teenage life so I fixed those humans minds to think they were adopting me as well. I wouldn't ever let them take you away without me!" she said.

    "Knock knock"

    The door opened slightly before opening completely.

    "Hey Asmina and Reanne!" she greeted us enthusiastically.

    "I always wanted to have sisters but mama never bore any children so I was kinda uoset. You can imagine how happy I was when it was decided that you two were to be adopted into our family! it's going to be sooooo fun!" she shrieked happily

    "i should be the one saying that! That you for deciding to adopt me!" I shrieked as well.

    "Me too. Me too! It's gonna be like sooo fun! We can go on dates and play with the boys, yeah!" Reanne said cheerfully.

    "I know!" Nikki spoke bouncing up and down with happiness

    "I'll leave you too to sleep then. Good night, sistas!" she spoke cheerfully closing the door.

    I stared after her.

    "Wow, humans are very bubbly" I mumbled.

    Reanne laughed her beautiful twinkling laugh.
    "I know!"

    I went to bed turning the lights off with Reanne.

    "Reanne?"

    "Mhm?l

    "I wonder what a school is like..."

    "It sounds fabulous on the internet. I guess we'll see tomorrow yeah?"

    "I guess so"

    School...I wonder if I will like it...

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    If 2 people comment I continue
     
  5. Yay!!!! I'm in the story!! That is totally my character!! U got it perfect!!
     
  6. Update!!!
     
  7. Lol. Nikki I updated. I love the story my dear! No criticism!
     
  8. Ok this part is short but whateve

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    I woke up at around 4am the next day. I couldn't sleep because I was so nervous.

    "School," I muttered nervously

    "Hey!" someone said cheerfully nearly making me faint with surprise.

    I turned around and saw Nikki.

    "You must be nervous for school, don't worry! There won't be any bullied and I doubt anyone would bully such a beautiful person like you!" she said reassuringly.

    "Your'e prettier than me. I love your brown eyes and hair! I have such ugly black hair," I said back to her smiling.

    "No way! Your black hair isn't ugly. Besides there's a bit of brown hair in your hair you know! Plus that blue and green highlighted streak in your hair makes you so pretty!" she said to me.

    "Oh thank you!" I said happily

    "Can I play around with your hair?I've always wanted to play with my own sister's hair!"

    "Oh sure!"

    Nikki bounced happily to her room and for the first time ever I felt true happiness.

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    Will update later tonight. Julie-su you will come in around the next or the next next part.
     
  9.  She doesn't know what school's are like?

    Well Reanne... They're... ._.

    Unexplainable. 
     
  10. The main character is Asmina. They don't know what homework is either 
     
  11. Yay. Can't wait for the update. No screw ups in this story. It's to awesome.
     
  12. -yawn- sorry i didn't updatei fell asleep. 

    I'll update in the morning. I need to sleep some more
     
  13. I slept plenty I'm going to update now
     
  14. Update time
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    I looked at myself in the mirror.

    "Wow you are like so totally awesome at braiding hairs!" I said examining my hair with delight.

    "Thanks sista!" Nikki replied.

    Drrrrrrrrrrrrring~

    "Are we playing who's the loudest with the alarm clock? I swear ur chatter is noisier than that alarm clock" said Reanne.

    I stuck my tongue out at her.

    "Its not my fault that I know how to enjoy the first day of school and you don't," I said teasingly.

    "Whateve," Reanne spoke.

    "Hey Hey!" said Nikki.

    "What?" Reanne and I spoke in unision.

    "I get to choose what to where on Mondays!" said Nikki.

    "Who made up that rule?" Reanne grumbled.

    "Just now," she said laughing.

    "Well, then let's hurry up and get dressed! I don't care what I wear," I spoke.

    Nikki handed me some black jeans and a yellow top with a green jacket.

    I hurridly changed into what Nikki had given me.

    I looked around me.

    "Err are you trying to um make us twins?" I said bewildered.

    Reanne was wearing the same thing!

    "Whateva. I need to get some breakfast. I'm so hungry I could eat a whole cow!" said Reanne.

    "Pig," I commented.

    After we had wolfed down out breakfast we rushed to school.

    Nikki jumped up and down next to me.

    "Do you usually bounce to school?" I remarked innocently.

    "Nope! I'm just excited about having you here! But unfortunately I have to go to the Middle School building while you guys go to the High School building!" she announced.

    "K guess we'll meet here after school?" I asked

    "Yup! You have to come here early, K?" Nikki said.

    "K," Reanne replied.

    I started walking to the Middle School building and froze.

    I turned back and looked at the sky.

    Could it be? Was Sylvester back?

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    Your in Julie-su
     
  15.  thank you aki!
     
  16. Wow!! You have created a great story line!!! How old r u?? Ur a good writer! keep up the good work!! Oh an... BUMPITY BUMP!! heehees
     
  17. I'm 17 but I wrote this when I was 12
     
  18. Thank you for the compliment