the Disobedient

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by _SydneyP_, Nov 4, 2011.

  1. Please check out my story, The Guy. Bump if u like it, tell me what's wrong if u don't... Anyway, bump! :)
     
  2. don't use my story to advertise yours.. 
     
  3. So guys. I forgot about the update. AAANNNDDD I forgot to update. By tonight , pinky promise.
     
  4. Hi, my name is Susan Johnson and this is my story.
    This all started one bright, sunny afternoon. I was outside, playing catch with my best friends, Angela and Ryan. Being the bored, idiotic 9 year olds we were, Ryan and I let our older friend, Angela convince us that everything would be fine.
    I remember this part in vivid detail. Ryan was flicking the lighter on and off, entranced by the flame. Angela tripped down the stairs from her attic, sending the box flying towards Ryan. He whipped around, fear in his eyes, the flame still flickering as the box of fireworks flew at him. In a split second the firework box was engulfed in flames and then everything went dark.
    When I awoke again, I found myself in a bright and unfamiliar room. Faces stared down at me, who were they? As I began blinking, the unfamiliar people cheered. I was completely confused, then everything came flying back. Ryan playing with the lighter, Angela tripping down the stairs, the explosion. "Where's Ryan? Is he alright!? WHERE. IS. RYAN?!" The doctors looked at Me, sad expressions on their faces. They shook their heads and glanced at the cot next to mine. There lay Ryan, completely still. His auburn floppy hair, singed on the ends. His pale face, had smudges of ashes everywhere. Ryan! My perfect, beautiful Ryan!
    I hate to admit it, but this was the day that I finally realized that I was in love with Ryan. After all of our sleepovers, our nights of staying up late watching movies, our early morning breakfasts together. Gone. All of it, was gone. I never would be able to tell him how I felt, I would never be able to hug his strong, caring body, never be able to mess up his wavy hair. All of it was... Gone. I jumped out of the cot, despite the doctors yells and ran to Ryan.. The heart monitor next to his cot made no noise and showed nothing but a completely straight line. "Noo...", I mumbled as I collapsed on the floor beneath his bed. This couldn't be happening to me. Not me, why me?.. These thoughts race through my mind. Why couldn't the explosion have taken me? Why must I have been the one to survive? I began to sob uncontrollably, the fact that he was GONE finally hitting me. Minutes later, in the middle of my weeping, I was pulled to my feet by a doctor. "Get back in the bed!", the rude man ordered. As soon as I sat down on the cot I was whisked away by the ER nurses. At this point, I leaned back and fell asleep thinking, 'When I wake up, Ryan will be lying next to me and everything will be fine.'
     
  5. Soo sorry for the lack of updating on time. I feel bad, and am past the intro so imma try and get another update up tomorrow: 
     
  6. Bump.
    Update tonight.
     
  7. No school tomorrow, update will be up tonight and hopefully again tomorrow.
     
  8. I need an update!!! :)