This might sound harsh, but I'm only trying to help. The story's okay but the bad grammar makes it unbearable. Be more descriptive and develop the characters more.
The plot is good but u have to listen to those people. This could be Really Good. But u have to try harder.
I agree with Jillian this story is good but it needs better grammar and description . (Not to be mean)
Michael calls Angel that same day. A: hello M: hey angel I really need to talk to you this is really important. A: Michael I don't want to talk to you and I'm not taking u back I'm going out with Jarod M: but thats what I called u about Angel he's using u to get back at Cindy for cheating on him A:Your Just trying to break us up so u can. Go out with me Michael I'm not stupid. M: Man whatever I don't care anymore I'm trying to help u angel so you don't get hurt I love you so much and you know I do but don't listen to me if u end up crying because your feelings got hurt dont come crying to me. A: BYE MICHAEL!!!!!! Angel hangs up the phone upset because of Michael. But she thought that times before when he told her stuff it was true but she don't want to believe Michael now because she was in love with Jarod. Next day at school Jarod walks in holding angels hand. They walk past Cindy Jarods ex. So Jarod turns and kisses angel on her cheek. To get cindy firing mad him.
If you feel that you want to continue it, you should. Don't bother about what people think of it. If you think it's good your readers will too so continue it. By the way good job in your plot.
Please don't ask for advice if you won't take it. At this point, I think this story has potential but I will stop reading it if you don't try harder, especially with grammar and punctuation. I'm sure I'm not the only one who feels this way.