Something Missing

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by CallMeNoona, Aug 22, 2011.

  1. Haha guys!! Wait until I'm fully done finishing it... although it may take a while...  but maybe not, depending on how much time I spend working on it! Haaaa... The version I have on here is like a total "waterdowned" version of the actual story although same sense and same everything although I didn't add in some things!
     
  2. Do you think I should turn "THIS" story into an actual novel??? (of course adding more things and more scenarios to make it a full length novel) 
     
  3. Ya, it definately has the potential. It needs to be a bit more descriptive in some spots, like you said, but it could definately be a great book 
     
  4. Haha! Of course it would never make it out there if I wrote it up like this!  but it'll take a Long time to get it into a good novel format and stuff! But I am willing to work hard! 
     
  5. This.is.awesome. Bump!!!!!!!!!(100000X)
     
  6. YES! if you turned this into a novel ot would be amazing!!! Just add some extra details an it will be perfect! 
     
  7. "Mr.Cartier?"

    I watched as the man I loved stood before me and smiled lovingly at me. A gust of wind arose and the lovely autumn leaves of the trees blew all around them.

    "Haah... pretty dramatic," Mr.Cartier. He was talking most likely about the leaves. His hair blew in the wind. He smiled again and pushed his glasses up further on his nose. "So. How are you? The nurse told me what you wanted her to tell me."

    "M... M..." I was at loss of words. I didn't know what to say to him.

    "Why are you sorry?" he asked. "And I don't think it's your fault. I did what I did to protect you, it was my choice. I don't blame you for what happened and you shouldn't either. Understand?" he asked.

    "I... I'm sorry..."

    "I just told you. It's not your fault. It's mine. But should I have let you jump out of that window? No way. I could never let something happen to you. Never..." he said sighing.

    "Why... why do you do this to me?!" I demanded. "Why do you play with my feelings like this?!"

    "Play with your feelings?"

    "Why do you always say things like this? It makes me fall so much more in love with you! You know that?"

    "What if I don't want you to stop loving me?" he asked smiling.

    "You... you selfish man..." I whispered.

    His smile disappeared. "I guess I am. But then again... you're the one who is selfish."

    "What do you mean?!" I demanded angrily.

    "You know exactly what I mean! You make it seem as though I have no choice but to love you! You always tell me you love me and expect me to tell you that I feel the same! What if I can't forget Laura?!"

    I gave out somewhat of a small gasp. Was he still... in love... with Laura? Was I really being that selfish? To think he loved me?

    "But I heard you say..."

    "Are you sure it wasn't just a dream? I don't recall ever saying I had feelings for you."

    "Mr.Cartier! What's wrong with you?! You never act like this! Have I done something wrong? What happened?!" I could feel myself losing consciousness and my heart picking up speed.

    "You're marrying Lyle today, aren't you? Don't object, Jillian told me..."

    I couldn't reply... I was too shocked to speak.

    "Damn it! How could you?! After everything I said and you're still marrying him?! How do I know that you love him instead of me?! I mean, wouldn't you NOT be marrying him if you loved somebody else?!"

    Tears formed in my eyes. "You don't know how I feel..."

    He closed his mouth and stared at me.

    "I may be marrying him. But does that mean I love him? You jump to conclusions without thinking of possibilities... I love you and only you. Even though I know I won't be happy with Lyle... what other choice do I have since you 'don't love me back'?"

    He stared at me for a few seconds before he clenched his teeth together and lunged towards me. He engulfed me in his arms.

    "Damn it Katherine. Don't you dare say that I don't love you ever again..."

    I covered my mouth with my hand to prevent myself from sobbing all over him. I cried into his chest tears flowing down my cheeks like waterfalls.

    "I love you... Katherine," he said lifting my chin up and smiling at me. "I love you so much," he said. He gently brushed my tears away with his hand before kissing my lips.

    I wrapped my arms around his neck and kissed him in return. He loved me! He truly loved me! "I love you too..." I whispered.



    "I love you with all my heart... Mr.Cartier..."
     
  8. Bump
     
  9. and shes still marrying Lyle!? DONT LET HER MR CARTIER!!!
     
  10. Oh dear... PLOT TWIST... Not really, we all knew Cartier wuuuuvs Kathrine
     
  11. Lol bump at 9pm
     
  12. And Katherine is marrying Lyle?


    No!!!!

    I just realized that we have no news of Lyle yet.

    Does that mean he is planning something big?!?!???

    And dangerous?!?!??
     
  13. Dayumn. This is legen-wait for it and
     
  14. I hope you're not lacrose intolerant cause the next word is- DAIRY :)
     
  15. YES!!! FINALLLYYYY!!!! OH MY GISH MY HEART WAS RACING SOOOOOOOOO FAST!!! DO NOT MARRY LYLE 
     
  16. I have to admit.... my heart exploded while writing this.... I was like "OMG FINALLY YOU (Mr.Cartier) CONFESSED!!! ITS ABOUT DAMN TIME TOO YOU IDIOT!!!" and then I was "lol.... I just yelled at my own writing... my character..." 
     
  17. Lol. Awesome!! I laughed(I don't remember why) I cried(shh, that's a secret) it was awesome! Thankyou! She can't marry Lyle. 
     
  18. Haha no one likes Lyle! Personally I love Lyle!  (just my fantasy )