Lol, I should probably tell you this takes place in the future when evil jerks take over the world and...eh it'll explain itself later. Btw, it was more like a jail... My minds a little messed up. Lol
That'd be useful if put at the beginning of the story describing the future setting unless it's being used as a twist/ "twilight zone" effect. This has been writing tips with Dittle
Charlie grew quiet. I turned, trying to hide my tears. I thought I heard Charlie sit down, but then I felt hands on my shoulders. By reflex, I grabbed his arms and flipped him over me, and slammed my foot down on his back, knocking the wind out of him. I laughed uncontrollably as he wheezed "Oh my God I am so sorry!!!" I laughed. "What the he'll was that?!" he joked.
No problem. I know about the stuff. I'm currently finishing a book to try and get it published XD Keep up the good work though!
You have to somehow enterweave the subliminal message into the action so you don't have to go around explaining Just kidding that's more expert level shit
Charlie caught his breathe and jumped up, scooping up my legs, hauling me over his shoulder. He realized how light and starved I was. He set me down. "hungry?" he asked. My eyes widened as I nodded