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Log Update 7: Planned Ahead of Time Tesishone Middle School Classroom 6-C Yuki’s Feelings The classroom was as boring as always and the teacher piled up us with homework, but guess what it is all for that stupid project I have to do with Renae. Once the teacher had finished telling us about the zillionth time that this project is so important and counts greatly towards our grade the students of the class slowly, almost resembling zombies went to find their partner and get to work. Renae surprisingly stayed in her seat trying to look like she wasn’t interested, well when I say trying I mean she is looking back and forward between a window that faces out to empty hall way and me. It was getting to the point where her head looked like it was going to fall off because she kept doing it so fast, impressive but…I hate to say it but we need to get to work. Walking straight up to her I waved my hand in front of her face making sure she noticed me. “Oh sorry Yuki, I didn’t notice you.” She said with a fake laugh. “No problem.” I did my best fake smile to combat her fake laugh and sure enough we finally got down to do some work. “Yuki, how would you describe the meaning of this poem?” Renae and I were sitting on parallel sides of each other with two wooden desks separating us. “Isn’t that one of the questions you have to do? I’ve already finished that part.” My right hand cupped my right check as I looked at Renae so she could tell that I was annoyed with her. She didn’t seem to take any notice at all though. “Yeah but maybe if you gave me some tips, like…Letting me have a look at yours it might give me some ideas.” I let out a sigh and gave her the page I wrote the piece on. It would have taken about three quarters of the double lesson to complete the piece of work; I was relieved that she had done something! Though when I took a look at the paper, I snapped. Throwing everything we have been doing onto the floor in a blinding rage, the anger was flooding through me I couldn’t control it. “What the, are you serious! You spent the good part of more than half of two lessons, copying my work word for word!” I ripped her plagiarized work into two; my hands couldn’t let out the frustration fast enough. By now the whole class was looking at me, why were my emotions so hard to…My body collapsed into a heap onto the hard and cold surface of the floor. Control, maybe it’s just puberty. Without my knowledge warm tears started to flow down my pale face, I hated these tears, I dint need to be crying but why was I. In the moment Lillian came to my rescue and quietly helped me up, hustling me out of the classroom to the nearest girl’s bathroom. Renae’s Reality Classroom 6-C Dumb, annoying, that’s what my life seems like lately an empty hole that’s too deep to climb out of. Yuki had just blown up at me I sat in complete silence, the wooden chair making my bottom feel numb until they started to laugh, and those people that used to be my friends. My shallow former friends, I could hear them whispering to each other ‘wow I didn’t realise she was that dumb’ and ‘if she copied off of me I bet she couldn’t even understand half the words I wrote’.. The words stung but the truth was in every single hurtful word they said, I couldn’t take it all the negativity that was surrounding me. I bolted out of the classroom and out of this dumb school as fast as I could. My footsteps making the left over rain puddles splash up all over me, my skirt and top wear damp and I couldn’t think straight anymore not like I ever could. The sun was hiding behind the clouds. “Was the sun sad?” Stop it Renae enough with the stupid stuff. “Maybe.” I froze, whose voice was that? Am I finally starting to hear things, but I’m still sane…I think. “What’s wrong, cat got your tongue? Hmm by the look of your…Damp uniform I think it’s safe to say we go to the same school.” The voice was getting closer. Suddenly I felt a warm hand upon my shoulder and I jumped at the gesture. Turning around to face a girl, she had light freckles on her face and her green eyes stared into mine. Her uniform appeared to be our school uniform and her face did seem familiar so I nodded to her. She gestured me towards a huge oak tree that had been planted on a slanted patch of grass, the cool shade of the tree helped me to gather what little of thought I had in my head. “So you have a name kid? Mines Annabelle.” She looked out onto what appeared to be a stream a few feet ahead of us. Tesishone River Bank Annabelle’s Logic Ahh the peaceful silence of the riverbank broken by just one girl, still don’t know her name. I was having a relaxing daydream before, I was waiting on Miya to walk passed we were sent on an errand to fetch some supplies for the cooking class. We were sent quite a while ago and still couldn’t get what we needed that’s when Miya decided to try her luck at a local market she heard about. Considering I have been here for what feels like an eternity I suppose after I sort out this girls problem, I’ll go look for her. “My names Renae.” Renaes silky, brunette hair feel onto her face, her face burred into her knees. “What were you talking about with the sun earlier?” She moved her head to the side so her face was looking towards me. I yawned and stretched out both my arms. “Well, haven’t you ever thought that the weather changes your mood, like if it’s sunny you feel a bit brighter don’t you?” Renae sat up this time looking at me with interest. “Or if it’s raining don’t you feel gloomier? Well if the weather makes us feel like that what do you think the sun feels, when it’s hiding…To me I think it’s sad or at least worried about something.” Renae looked at me like I was a bloody alien or something! “So you…Don’t think that that was dumb of me?” She clenched her small hands. Something in me clicked though. “Oh so you must be Renae Cultic, the girl who seems dumb!” I pounded my fist into an open palm of my other hand. She stumbled back, from her response I was sure it was her. Suddenly glimmers of a tear feel upon her check. “Seems, what’s that supposed to mean? I’m dumb and I know it so you don’t have to try and make me feel better!” She burred her head into her lap again as I continued to look at the slowly flowing river. “As if I would try to make you feel better, I don’t even know you. It’s just an observation or calls it a hunch that I have.” Man this girl is touchy. She sniffled for a bit. “So are you saying I’m not dumb because I think that makes you dumber than I am.” Sighing I stood up and kicked her politely on her side rib.” Are you ever going to get anywhere with that sort of attitude. Listen I’m not going to base my knowledge of a person on some stupid rumour I heard. Renae, tell me…Truthfully why do you think your dumb?” Renaes eyes grew wide like she already had an answer of the question. “Be…Beca…Because I…Stoped trying. I stopped trying when things got hard and I became lazy and complacent!” She stuttered but got to the point I wanted her to see and her eyes lit up. “Well do you want to be stuck in that mindset forever or are you willing to work on getting to your hidden goal.” I stood up and left my hand out for Renae to grab onto, secretly I was hoping she would take it fast… So she can…Go back to a nicer life, something that I’m unable to do. Within a minute she grabbed onto it and we went our separate ways, her going back to school and me…Still waiting for Miya, man the times slow today. 0--------------0 Hope you guys had as much fun as I did while writing this update!
Log Update 8: Remember The Name Tesishone Suburbs Yuki's Place Lillian's Thoughts As I walked up the grass planted street path the hot wind blew passed my tanned face. I walked up the path to Yuki’s two story, neatly kept house. The front garden looked like something out of Alice in Wonderland, the hedges surrounding the path and around the front yard. The hedge was decorated in dried out white flowers that I could imagine looked gorgeous in spring. I knocked hard on the solid wooden door, it slowly opened and I got greeted by a handsome, clean shaved man in his early twenties. "Oh it's you Lillian." He chuckled and turned his head towards a white, well when it was brand new I assumed it would have been white but was now visibly dirty staircase. "Yuki! It's Lillian!" His short black, slicked up, jelled hair sparkled against the chandlers light as head walked back deeper into the huge, clean house. "See ya later Taku." I said in a composed voice, Taku was Yuki's oldest brother. He sort of acts like a parent, I guess in some terms when Yuki’s parents are at the hospital. Witch by the parentless appearance of the house I'm guessing that's where they are tonight. "Lillian, yo what brings you here?" Yuki greeted my while she was running down the staircase, I crossed my arms in my response. "Yuki you know." I sighed giving her a sympathetic look. "Earlier today at school, you went home after that whole incident with Renae." Yuki’s usually happy disposition turned into a frown. "Lillian let's go up to my room." she gestured up the stairs and down the hallway into the most fragile bedroom that I have ever laid eyes on. It was fragile in a sense because of all the small, pretty, delicate knickknacks her grandmothers had given her over the years considering she was the only girl on both sides of the family. If you were to touch anyone of them I'm sure they would break in an instant, I turned to face my best friends short, bob cut, and blond haired head. She took her arm and rested it on her Victorian style wooden desk while I laid back on the white sheets of her matching bed. "Lillian, you realize Renaes a handful don't you?" She ran her hand through her thinned out hair watching the strains fall neatly back into place. "I understand that, I can't tolerate her much but it isn't like you to go...Well go make a scene in front of the whole class like that. She's not the smartest of the bunch but sometimes you just have to put up with people." Staring up at the flora pattern ceiling my energy had escaped from my grasp, this whole day has been one big mess it's driving me insane. "Lillian, I....I thought you would take my side!" I’m in trouble now, I thought to myself as she yelled. "I now she's as dumb as a brick, I tried to help but she abused it." She let out a huge grunt. That's it Yuki let all the frustrations out, you’re not that mad your just worried about him. "Let's visit Hikaru." My hands reached out and softly wrapped around Yuki's smooth and silky hands. She gave in return a cheerful smile and a slight nod, as we charged out of the house. "Taku Lillian and I are going to the hospital!" Yuki yelled turning around at the front door where Taku was cleaning. He gave as a gentle nod and continued to do his chores. Tesishone General Hospital Teenage Ward Yuki's Feelings Here we were, I promised myself to be strong. Stronger mentally, not to let my emotions get out of control and physically...Soccer nationals are coming up in two and a half weeks’ time and I had my eyes on the prize nothing or no one was going to beat me! Hikaru...Lillian and I walked through the hallways of the hospital; people were coughing right and left. This was one of the reasons I hate visiting see all these teenagers and children that rarely get to go outside. Never being able to run as fast as they can down a giant hill with friends feeling your legs were about to fall off but you didn't care. We got to Hikaru’s room, 108 I read tracing the letters of Hikaru Down. Lillian tried to be at her happiest and I did the same we quickly ran to opposite sides of his hospital bed. It was a private room so it was only him and the nurses, it must be annoying being trapped in a confined space I know I couldn't deal with it. "Good evening Hikaru, Lillian and I are here to see you." I looked at my older brother’s sickly pale face, his kind blue eyes deteriorating into a soul less washed out blue. His unwashed, bed head, blond hair thinning out and losing some of its colour. I hated, no I couldn't stand looking at him! Why, why couldn't he just be magically cured? Why did it even have to be someone as positive and inspirational as him, Hikaru the second son of the Down family had everything going for him. Just above average grades, a brilliant athletic opportunities ahead of him. But no fate just couldn't let someone like that be happy. "Oh hello Lillian." He tried his best to smile but I knew he was weakening with every visit. "Yuki I missed you so much, how is my little sister’s soccer going." He asked running his cold, pale hands through my hair. It was hard to fight back the tears but it was necessary I couldn't let him see me cry. I need to be strong. "It's going good; in trainings I've been getting an average of 1.5 goals a practice match. Don't worry we won't be long I just wanted to see how you were doing." He smiled; it wasn't even forced or needed energy. "That's good, what about you Lillian. I hope you’re taking care of Yuki making sure she hasn't gotten into trouble." He tilted his head to the window beside Lillian and let out a small chuckle followed by a couple of coughs. Lillian turned her head to me and gave me a big smile. "Well as much of a handful she is, she's been pretty good lately." He looked back at me with those loving eyes but slowly closed them. At that time the nurses came in saying he needed to rest and we were assorted out. "Thank you Lillian, I really needed that. I'm so thankful to have a friend who understands me this much." I smiled and bring her into a hug; she returned my gesture by hugging back. "Don't forget I'm thankful to you as well, you mean a lot to me Yuki. I'll always be here for you." We walked out of the hospital in a better mood then when we were walking in. As the sun began to set I could tell that I could tackle any hurdle that comes my way. Tesishone Middle School Club Room Cole's Opinion Humph. How dare those guys come here acting like they own this place, right now a couple of guys from a rival school came to challenge us. They seem tuff, like the stereotypical delinquent but hopefully they have a brain and relies who they are dealing with. It was late and most club members had already so it was only me, but I didn't care that's how I liked it. Alone. I laughed out loud at their challenge. "Ha! You think you can challenge and beat the Leader of this school! I, Cole Noah! Ha, good luck." I charged straight at them, by their eyes I knew that they were expecting some soft, big mouthed girl. All bark but no bite well I will make them regret ever having that opinion of me. I was head to head with one of the guys, punching at every opening he showed and dodging every wasted punch him through. When suddenly this one big guy, from the rival school jumped on me. "You call this fighting?" He asked his voice was deep and had traces of seriousness. “Didn’t you see what I just did?!?" I tried to get off from the hard, solid concrete but his huge body was weighing down on me, I couldn't escape. "Oh let me guess." A smaller guy came from behind the one I was punching; he squatted near my body and flicked my black hair strains. "You think your so tuff you don't need anyone, everyone is below you. Or is it that no one wants to be your friend, no one wants to back you up and that shows your greatest weakness." His tone and what he was saying were surprisingly truthful and nasty, why would he care about what happens with my social life anyway! I...I know I can't make friends it's hard for me to trust, everyone I ever hanged out with as a child betrayed me. Though even with all that, why do I still want a friendship! I want to feel the closeness of a real friendship and not just a stupid shallow one. I want to be able to go over to a friend’s house, to go places together, to just talk to on the bloody phone most nights and have our parents tell us off for talking too much. How pathetic why do you want something so weak? While my thoughts were in a disgraced state a shining bright light hit my face, the huge guy sitting on me had stood up. To the glare of the sun I saw what looked like to be an angel in disguise. Her blue hair careful curled up into two pig tales tied back with silky red ribbon. Her hands were placed precisely on her hips, her red lips slowly opened to sound out elegant syllables. "What is going on here, a fight? Really now I relies that this is how some schools win territory and academic events but honestly." Her voice was shaky at some parts but still kept an eerie of calmness and control. Suddenly like the little cowards I know they are the rival school fled like flees to soap. The 'leader' I took to be wasn't finished with this yet he turned, his silver hair sparkled in the sun. "Listen, Cole Noah. Just remember Fort Min Academy is watching you. This rivalry has just begun!" He then proceeded to sprint after his other two friends. The blue haired girl came to my side and sat down, cross legged and hands in her lap. Just like a pre-schooler. "Cole Noah right, classroom 6-D, reportedly hangs out at school in the afterhours. Average grades and barely any application. Yep sounds like you." She looked towards the clouds, her eyes appearing like they were in a distant world from us that was far away. "So? Yeah that's me what do you want are you one of the class reps cause I don't care for your crap." I tried to act cool; it was hard I admired her after all. Why, why couldn't I just go up to her and ask to hang out with recess. No I couldn't, I didn't know how to be a friend. All I could do is relate on what was the best video game out with my followers and second family. "Hey listen I know class reps in the past have been like that but I'm a new evolution in the class representation chain. So I won't get in your business all I will say is what are you doing here at school of all places so late?" She asked with a small smile on her face, her cerulean eyes still staring at the pure white clouds. I pulled myself off the ground and kneeled beside her. "I had nothing better to do." I asked hoping I pulled off a short temper. Her small hand reached over her mouth and I think she did what I imagined a mouse giggle would sound like. "Listen I'm bored your bored. I want you to not fight anymore and for that I need to build a." In that moment she looked saddened as she looked up at the clouds. "Relationship, so what about it want to get a bite to eat after school tomorrow?" My head just couldn't process this, the one person I admired the most was asking me to hang out with her! I couldn't believe it, it seemed so simple to her to just ask me. She's even more amazing then I thought, I replied with a nod and stayed up all night pinching myself that this was a dream.