That's the problem, it's not. It makes it seem as if you lack creativity. It started to go downhill around Chapter 2. Some of the things I could easily point out, but others simply got me lost (who the hell is Kronos? A GoW reference?).
U should see the story I'm writing with qinny! its totally original except we used a popular real life person...
Oh. I was actually going to make him a titan, and Zeus,poseidon, and hades arent gods but the greatest magicians ever.
Apoc looked at Sam. 'okay, I'll give u that, u are stronger. Now u three go and finish off Otto.' he pointed at Sam, Ninz, and lily. 'I have another pest to take care of.' said Apoc A's he disappeared. Ninz started walking, Sam and lily following. Then they all disappeared. 'you all ready to die?!?!' Epic asked A's he started laughing. 'I think u will be the one to die, epic.' fletch said, stepping forward. 'bring it!' said epic. Fletch lunged. And then ice covered his body. He couldn't move. 'a little slow on your feet, aintcha?' said a voice out of nowhere. Then a man appeared right beside epic. They looked exactly alike, except for instead of epics red hair, he had blue hair. 'I'm epic Popsicle, epic fire's twin bro. Nice to meetcha!' said epicP. 'I believe that we r supposed to kill them, F. Why arent u? We were ordered by animus TO KILL THEM!!!!!!!' and that's when both their heads came off. 'sorry, rookies, u better watch UR enemies closely.' Said fletch A's he sheathed his sword. The ice was still there, but fletch wasn't in it obviously. 'well, well. So u ARE better than I thought. U r living up to your name, fletch.' said epicF. 'we need to kill him and Otto before they become a nuisance.' he said to epicP. 'all right, lets rev it up then.' said epicP. The both of them released their magic full power. Light and darkness mingled, the yin-yang symbol was created between the two brothers that were on the same side, and yet so opposite. 'now u all DIE!!!!!!' they yelled together and launched themselves at Otto. 'now this is finally getting interesting.' muttered Otto to himself, smiling. Jodie was staring out the window when she felt a disturbance between good and bad. 'enjoying yourself, Apoc?' she asked to herself, knowing she was alone. 'yes I am.' said Apoc, making Jodie jump. 'but I'm not behind the incident in Paris, though.' he was sipping his tea. 'what do u want Apoc? I won't tell u anymore than what u got out of me last night. I didn't know otto could turn into that thing I swear.' Jodie said, looking scared. 'sadly, I didn't come here to talk, since I know u won't cooperate. I have seen into your soul and I know about your dormant powers. I can reawaken them if you wish, just come with me.' He disappeared, leaving a large black hole behind. 'I don't know what this is about, but I don't like it one bit.' she muttered A's she followed Apoc. Then she disappeared A's well.