Orphan

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by TheOneYouWantToBe, Mar 4, 2012.

  1. BumpSuch a good story
     
  2. Dude..... I just read this whole story....
























    It's awesome!!!
     
  3. Chapter 13:

    When I finally awoke the woman was still there, looking down at me. She was in her fourty's, but still had a young face. She reminded me of someone at school. Could it be that she was a teacher? No, she wouldn't have adopted me if she knew what a dumb-ass I was. Adopted! I was being adopted! This was to much for me to ask for. A free bed, and free food. A wave of sadness passed over me as I remembered all of the dunks and drug addicts in my old area of town. If only... If only they could have been adopted when they were my age maybe... Just maybe they would have had a normal life. "I'm going to change that!" I thought. One day, when I'm much older, and I have the money and resources, I'm going to change those people's lives. No. Stop fantasizing Oliver! I can't get all dreamy. Not now. It was only then that I realized that the woman had been talking to me the whole time. "Would you Like to see your new family Oliver?" She asked excitedly. I nodded but I wasn't sure what to expect. Maybe I needed more time to prepare. But it didn't seem like I had any say in the matter anymore because with a wild look on her face she pulled me out of my bed. She was pure hyper. As I walked with her down the stairs I stared at the many, very un-necessary things on the walls, like paintings. Waste of money I thought as we trudged toward the kitchen where I could hear chatting. Quickly the woman stopped me before entering. "Are you ready to meet your father and sister, Oliver?" She asked, but to me, it sounded like a threat. I gulped. A sister? This was going to be interesting. "Yes" I said, as quiet as possible. The people in there had obviously heard my new Mom ask me the question, but for whatever reason, I didn't want them to hear me. I knew my life was about to change dramatically. But I had never expected what was about to happen. I gasped as I rounded the corner. Sitting at the table with a man in a business suit was Karina Pike. The butter knife girl. "This is going to be complicated" I groaned. But I put on my greatest smile I could make as approached them. This was going to be very, very complicated.




    So guys. Did you like it? Was it good for my first story? And... Do you want a sequel?
     
  4. Amazing job That was a fantastic story
     
  5. Definitely a sequel! 
     
  6. Great story!!!!
     
  7. Good. Good.
     
  8. Hmm. I need more opinions. Sequel or no sequel?
     
  9. SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL SEQUEL!!!!!! is that enough opinions?
     
  10. SEQUEL, OBVIOUSLY.
     
  11. Well when I get back from vacation I'll think about a sequel. I have an idea for a different story though, so I really need more opinions.