Orphan

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by TheOneYouWantToBe, Mar 4, 2012.

  1. Bump and wall me when you update<3:)
     
  2. Thanks for the support guys. I'm really tired and can't get anything good written right now but I'll update it in the morning :)
     
  3. This is really good. Grammar is good and it makes sense.  Continue! And yess, it should have a happy ending! And a sequel! It could be a trilogy! 
     
  4. Bump!!

    I actually want a tragic ending lol

     
  5. (oops,too small)

    I actually want a tragic ending...lol
     
  6. Maybe not a happy ending. Otto doesn't like them. Maybe a pseudohappy ending.
     
  7. yay! We think alike!
     
  8. -shrug- The story's nice either way. 
     
  9. Psuedo-happiness.


    Happy endings are too cliché, they make Disney seem so dark in an exagerrated comparison.

    But nonetheless, I LOVE IT.
     
  10. YAY!! Blizzy-sama thinks alike! ^^
     
  11. Yay me you blizzy and Otto are alike
     
  12. In my opinion, I'd like a bad ending, so the readers would get sucked in it some more than you can make a come-back sequel! ( unless you think of him of dying )
     
  13. Oh yeah, this is brilliant! 
     
  14. Chapter 5:

    I couldn't open my eyes. I was choking. Claws was yowling. I screamed. The pain was unbearable as I grabbed a sharp metal rod and sliced my left eye. My vision was red with blood, but it was open. Then I realized why I was choking. Smoke was everywhere. Smoke and fire. A saw some kids from school screech off in there beat-up truck. They had thrown a burning two by four into my home and anything flammable was ablaze. Claws's yowling abruptly stopped as a piece of rusted metal fence tipped over and fell on him, slicing him in half. "NO!!!" I screamed, but there was nothing I could do. My cat was dead, and I was actively dying. I collapsed. I had failed. When Claws needed me most I had failed him. He was dead ad there was nothing left for me to keep the will to live. I was accepting his fate. But that didn't mean it was any less painful to watch chunks of fur and blood to evaporate and burn up in the colossal inferno of my home. Why? Why did it have to end this way? Why? I stared to cry.