New Girl

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *re8ba (01), Jan 19, 2013.

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  1. I like this story just be careful with your punctuation especially with speech. I prefer it when a new one is started each time the speaker changes otherwise I get a Tad confused

    Please don't around around stop this
     
    #21 KirraR, Jan 25, 2013
  2. I like this story just be careful with your punctuation especially with speech. I prefer it when a new one is started each time the speaker changes otherwise I get a Tad confused

    Please don't stop this story I really like it
     
    #22 KirraR, Jan 25, 2013
  3. Kk thanks for the advice and sry if it was a little confusing
     
    #23 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  4. It was just the last update , seemed like you were excited about getting it up :)
     
    #24 KirraR, Jan 25, 2013
  5. I have decided to start another story but i will still be writing this story also
     
    #25 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  6. My next story will be called, "My version of Hetaila"
     
    #26 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  7. but it wont even start for a while
     
    #27 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  8. Really u r? Well good luck
     
    #28 *wingshadow (01), Jan 25, 2013
  9. Ty Prussia
     
    #29 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  10. If anyone has any ideas of how to continue the story wall me.
     
    #30 *re8ba (01), Jan 25, 2013
  11. Its really good.... But when you update dont updat in timy paragraphs... Have it as one long update so the
    reader knows what is the update ans what isnt... Also,
    separate the dialogue from the body paragraphs somwe know whose talking and Identify the speakers ^-^ but you dont always need "I said, She said, She replied.. etc."

    KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
     
    #31 -iEmiHaveHimTrippinForDays, Jan 26, 2013
  12. Thanks simply me but i usually dont have much to write so it makes it seem bigger in separate paragraphs
     
    #32 *re8ba (01), Jan 26, 2013
  13. ^-^ thats ok hun just take your time with it
     
    #33 -iEmiHaveHimTrippinForDays, Jan 26, 2013
  14. But really im out of ideas. Brain fart!!
     
    #34 *re8ba (01), Jan 27, 2013
  15. BUMP!!!
     
    #35 *wingshadow (01), Jan 27, 2013
  16. i cant like i said i have a brain fart please pitch me ideas!!!!!!
     
    #36 *re8ba (01), Jan 27, 2013
  17. I cant i have a brain fart please pitch me some ideas!!!!!
     
    #37 *re8ba (01), Jan 27, 2013
  18. We were walking home when something hit me. Where is Megan, she wasn't at school, nor did her parents call her in sick. I had a feeling we would find out soon enough.

    "Have you guys seen Megan anywhere today????

    "Nope but Sabrina I think we're about to find out, replied Rebecca.

    Sure enough, there was a note on the table that said, "See what happens when you meddle, someone gets hurt. I gladly invite you to meddle some more, that is, unless you want to end up like your friend here. Megan seems to enjoy me very much.
    The Unknown

    "Well you guys, should we stop?????

    "Do we even have a choice in that question, Sabrina????

    "No, no you guys don't have a choice Kysten."


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    The reason y will be revealed in the next portion.
     
    #38 *re8ba (01), Jan 28, 2013
  19. Yeah Meg's gone
     
    #39 *wingshadow (01), Jan 28, 2013
  20. U dont know yet
     
    #40 *re8ba (01), Jan 28, 2013
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