It's quite a good story,but it is unclear why she has to lie to him. Also,what happened at the end? Your storyline is great but it needs some editing.
She kept quiet but i knew her mind was swirling. I stayed there, waiting patiently. After a while, she broke into tears. I stood up and embraced her. Her tears stained my clothes but she kept on crying. I soothed her by patting her head. She gripped my shirt and sobbed harder. "Shh...its okay. Go on and cry." And thats what she did until she couldn't anymore. I wiped away her tears and patted her head. She weakly smiled and blew out her nose with a tissue. "Im sorry you had to see that. You're right. I was jealous cause my best friend got stolen by another person and all this time i just wanted her back. I used to think everything was a competition. I thought stealing you would make it all better but i was wrong." I stayed quiet, intently listening. She poured out everything that she bottled up. Her family was falling apart and only Kate understood her the best. They were somewhat like twins but also very different. She kept wiping escaping tears and she would take pauses cause she seemed tired. "Ash, could you help me get the cure? Please...its been a long time since i've seen her. I miss her" She looked at me and smile. She then looked down at her fingers and stood up. She walked over to her dressing table and opened a drawer. I see a hint of red that glimmered. My eyes were narrowed to see what she took out. Her fingers gripped a long glass bottle that was filled with some kind of red liquid. She walked back to me and held it out to me. "To be honest, i knew about Kate's disease and i stole a bit of it of the cure from my grandfather to save her. I decided to not give it cause i was so furious but its time to save my bestfriend." I gave her a smile and traced a finger along the smooth glass bottle. I embraced her and then kiss her forehead. "Thank you Ash. You have no idea how much im grateful. After all that time trying to find the antidote and you had it. Thank you for giving it to me." I gave her another smile and then i jump down the balcony. I ran back to the house and slammed the door open. My sisters jumped from the sound and asked what happened. I held out the bottle and told them i got it. They squealed and hugged me. "Ethan..." I turn to Natasha. She was looking at the calender and i saw it too. My heart dropped. We barely had 3 days left to save her. "Quick! Prepare the jet to get back home now!" Julia called and said we leave in the morning. I text Ash to pack up and meet us at the airport first thing in the morning. We all packed our belongings and quickly get to the airport. We met up with Ash and then as fast as possible got on our private jet. It took a day to get back. We ran out the jet and i got in my car. I drove to Kate's house. She wasnt home so i called June. She said they were shopping for a dress. My heart relaxed a bit after confirming she was still okay. I remembered that it was the High School Dance tonight. I drove back to the house and got dressed. Ash stayed at the hotel and i picked her up. We arrived at the dance and i quickly search for Kate. Ash went inside and tried finding her. I searched outside and i saw her, standing on the courtyard, deep in thought. My heart raced as i see her, beautiful as ever. She grew thinner and her face was paler. I cautiously took a step towards her. A tear escaped from her eyes and i wiped it away with my thumb. I couldnt stand it any longer and kissed her lips. She seemed surprised but then wrapped her arms around my neck as i wrappedmine around her waist. "Ethan..." "Shh...I'm here now" We danced to the music inside as it turned to a slow song. I missed her so much. It was heaven seeing her face, holding her close and hearing her voice. I was right,she's my universe. I felt her fingers slipping away and then she collapsed to the ground. "Kate!" I carried her as Ash got out from the building. "Take my keys! Drive Ash" She quickly took them and opened the door. She sat in the front and started the engine. I held Kate close and gave her as much warmth as possible. She felt cold as ice and looked pale as ever. Her lips were blue and her eyes wont open. We arrived at the hospital in 5 minutes thanks to her fast driving. "Please help her!" The doctors i knew quickly took her to the operating room and i followed. Everyone knew eachother in this town and they knew Kate's disease. I take out the antidote and tried to make her drink. She kept coughing it out, she wont drink it. "Please Kate...take it.Dont leave me!" I take the botte in my hands and looked at her. I took some in my mouth and kissed her, making her swallow. Wake up please. I love you "ETHAN NO!", i heard Ash yell. ______________________________ sorry its fast forwarded a bit Hope you enjoyed it. I didn't add in the journey getting the cure cause it'll take too long
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