Ed has a very very very bad history with chicks -.- he is a piece of trash it makes sense that his story is too, I apologise if this offends anyone other than ed, but he cause probs in my club with me n others.
This absolutely sucks. The ones encouraging this crap story are just as much to blame. Don't say we critics are "sorry pieces of trash" because we tell the truth. If you can't take criticism, get out because you do not belong here. I could of thought of so many different ways to make this story a whole lot better. Here are some of the few ideas I did think of: 1. Separate dialogue 2. More description 3. Longer updates 4. Better storyline 5. Try proof reading 6. Grammar is your friend, use it