Love hurts

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by NinjaJosh, Mar 15, 2012.

  1. You don't need to say any thing
     
  2. Josh you know if ur lieing, ur being pathetic.
     
  3. Update!

    I woke up to my phone buzzing beside me. It has been 18 years since that day, but I still think about and dream about it. It's like my nightmare!

    I picked up the phone, its was two in the morning. To me this usual, see I'm part of the police force who investigate murders. Gruesome, Yeah that's what I though. Turns out to be a fun job well not fun, but any way.

    I answered the phone, "Josh get down to Oxford street ASAP! There has been another collision this time its fatal!" Sophie shouted down the line. "ok give me five mins boss!" I replied my ears ringing from the command. I hung up and slipped on my L.P.M.I.U (which means London Police Murder Investigation Unit) overalls before locking the door and running to the car...
     
  4. I'm not lying Rhyan
     
  5. Fine.. Can I be in ur story?
     
  6. Thanks this is the first person to actually write a comment on my story 
     
  7. The second person to right on my comment though it's a insult
     
  8. Still dont know how i feel about this one... But i wiuld think 18 yrs=too long
     
  9. So then I'll say the story line, me Josh was dumped at the age of 12, ( not true ) 18 years later every now and then he has a dream or thinks about it, at the age of 30 he has joined police investigator or what ever you call em and one morning he gets called out for a investigation...

    UPDATE---------------------------

    I quickly drove to Oxford street. When I pulled up a car had smashed through a fancy shop's glass window and the driver was lying in a puddle of blood just in front of the car.

    "Hurry up Josh!" Sophie shouted, she was sending next to my college Rhys, who was taking pictures. One person was in the car having a look round.

    I ran over "Wass occurrin?" I asked.
    "A car has been speeding and has hit a window. Because the drivers seat belt wasn't on she propelled through the window" Rhys replied, he doesn't usually say much. It's normally Kaitlin who was investigating from in side the car.

    I walked up to Sophie and looked at the body "do we have any proof of who it is?" I asked. "yeah she's the same age as me and you, she Is a banker. Her name is..."

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    Find out who next time
     
  10. Please this time comment on the story don't mind if it's positive or negative
     
  11. I wanna be the dead person!
     
  12. I'm not telling any one  its surprise, why do you you wanna be the dead person?
     
  13. BumP. If its a story.
     
  14. Its a story
     
  15. Josh, what have I told you about self pity?


    Nobody's going to give it to you.

    SAM. WARNING NUMBER ONE.


    Josh, there is something called PM. We do not need you talking ablut nearly getting hit by a car and getting strangled by a stranger.

    I won't hesitate to call a mod, remind you.