Thx for the help. But what I don't get is how I start a story and it has some errors and I get slammed for it. But other ppl dont. Im not s noob I've done this b4 I've had an account on here b4 and I was nvr slammed in my story.
Look I'm picky as hell. I don't read every single story on here and try to fix them. I fix the ones that look interesting. I think your story can get somewhere. That's why I'm trying to help. You want to look like a great writer. Yes? Not a sloppy writer being lazy and unprofessional by putting "Thx" instead of "Thanks" you want me to give you a gold star? Give you a pat on the back and say "Good job!" then do it correctly. I know I come off harsh but I'm only trying to help.
This is my worst pet peeve: When someone writes a story and there's almost NO paragraphs in each update. Also, as someone before said, PLEASE space out your dialogue, and in general, your whole story. I'm pretty sure I speak for everyone when I say we hate it when someone has 2 paragraphs in one update. And, yes, we are kind of slamming you. But it's to help, not to hurt. We don't read every story, just the ones with titles that intrigue us. Try to expand your vocabulary. Like instead of saying 'small', you could say 'petite' or 'humble'. Elaborate more. What does the room look like? What do the characters look like? People can have so many different ideas of where and what people look like by reading with no characteristics to base them off of. Probably the most boring to write, but you'll only have to repeat a few times.
Trust me this is just the beginning. I've written three pages of this story already on paper. There is more detail of the characters
I know. You keep saying that, but it hasn't come. If you were trying to publish, I guarantee they'd send your story back. There's little elaboration and many grammatical errors. Definitely proofread your work, or get someone from PIMD to proofread it on Palringo or something.
More detail! Try to describe the characters more! Also space more often, it makes it look less sloppy, i learned that the hard way also. Also try to describe other things in the story, ex. The razor i held cut a deep, stinging line across my arm and blood started flooding out of the wound. It sounds better than; i cut my arm with a razor -_- It gives your readers visualisation on your words. Also grammar! Be your own editor and proof read before posting!
Oh my god. We're not slamming you. It's called criticism. I get criticized everyday: from my stories to what I wear in real life. But I TAKE that criticism and I APPLY it to myself to make me better in general. To slam means to attack verbally. We're not attacking you, we are criticizing you. There's a difference.
U know what just quit complaining about my dang story!!!!!! This is how I write and if u don't like it then leave. I don't need everyone's criticism. I know I'm a good writer. I've been told by loads of ppl. So shut up and let me write.
Ok! We are just trying to help you get better techniques to write more 'professional' By the way, when somebody thinks, there isn't any "s, thats for when a character talks. But its pretty good otherwise
*sighs* You know you're a good writer… Honey, to be frank, "good" writers don't use text speak when it's out of context. Just saying. No need to get so defensive, people are trying to help.
The plot in unclear, grammar needs work, and spacing is also flawed... Criticism...not slamming. Oh, and detail needs work.