I look:tan skin,brown hair,green eyes,wearing a slave clothing Mom:tan skin,blonde hair,light green eyes,wearing a slave dress Dad:tan skin,blonde hair,blue eyes,wearing a clothing that is for gardening Megan:tan skin:brown hair,broken eyes,wearing a small slave dress In a min forgot the people
Max:tan skin,brown hair,grey eyes,wearing a school uniform Joseph:tan skin,blonde hair with bangs,wearing a uniform Madison:tan skin,blonde hair,sky blue eyes,wearing a small mini black shorts with a gray beige tee Mr.Hake:tan skin,brown eyes,blonde hair,wearing a home clothing Mrs.Hake:tan skin,brown hair,brown eyes,wearing a gray and red plaid shorts with a bright white tee
I just don't think that all slaves wear the same thing that's stereotyping and I was asking what they were. Chill out.
It's fairly good Justin. I've seen a big improvement from the haunted house. A little more detail about the environment and how the characters look like would be nice. Very good tho.
Also a bit better planning would help you immensely. Know what's going to happen before you write and have a solid storyline that goes in a flow. If you work on these things you'll be an excellent writer