don't leave

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Takon (01), Sep 30, 2011.

  1. Bump great job!!
     
  2. yes!!!!!! bump!!!!!
     
  3. I need to know if there should be more?
     
  4. YES!!!!!!! bump
     
  5. Hearing the scream Carly roles into Drakes arms
    C: don't let go dont let go
    Tears flowing down her pale skin her mascara about to drip on the dress her caught it and wiped the tears away
    D: don't worry Carly I won't let anything happen to you and I won't let go
    Suddenly the was a knock on the front door and a harsh voice rang through the house
    Evil: come out and play I know you want to
    Drake picked up carly ran to the bathroom locked the door and hid in the bathtub
     
  6. Bump..I want moarr!!;)
     
  7. Just for you
     
  8. Drake pulled the curtain down over them with him on top he looked down into her soft tear filled golden eyes
    D: don't worry Carly I have you no one will touch you
    Carly all she can do is nod as Drakes blue eyes held her close
    C:drake I love you
    Drake was shocked he had never been told that some one loved himself so all he could mumble
    D: C-...Carly I love yo...
    Carly smiled and leaned up putting her arms around his neck and kissed him
     
  9. BumpGoooooooooooooo On. Bump. Bump. Bump. 
     
  10. It's a good plot, but develope your story more and PLEASE fix the grammar.