I called 911 soon after she was done hugging me. The ambulance arrived along with police cars. I guess they had to check if she was alright. "Nice work Max." A stranger's voice sounded behind me. I saw in front of me a tall, brunette, woman. She had brown eyes, a pretty face, pretty smile, and a body to die for...to touch. Excuse my thoughts, I am a guy after all. "Thanks. May I ask who you might be?" I said in my flirtatious tone. Which probably sounded idiotic to everyone but me. "I'm Isabella, but you can call me Liz." She said shaking my hand. "I'm Max, nice to meet you. But you already knew that." I said shaking her hand as if a criminal was not being hauled into a police car headed for jail right next to us. "I'm a reporter for the local news station. I'd like to interview you. But somewhere else, preferably. Maybe over coffee. It is just some questions." She said. "You're not a reporter, you don't have the attire, or the attitude." I said chuckling a bit. "Fine, you caught me." She said laughing along. "I didn't know you were that good. I just wanted to get to know you a bit." She said trying to be as charming as possible. "Yeah, sure." I said walking off a bit amused. I headed towards my car. I opened up my door which was reflecting the sun at me blinding me partially. I got in and started the car. I shook my head with a smile thinking what I'd done. I drove home and plummeted into my small bed after taking all of my clothes off except my boxers. I pulled my grey covers over me, and drifted to sleep even though it was still daytime. I was tired. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Predictions and feedback please!
Ooooooooh me likey... Prediction... She's the murder! BWA HAHA!!!! She wants to get to know him better then STRIKE! Like a cobra! I like wall me when you update again.
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I know a reader shouldn't just bump and if possible give critiques and such,I however am not a certified critique..so I'm just going to give my opinion Your detailing of the story is marvellous,however,your storyline reminds me much of the series-The Mentalist..of which the main character is also in search of a mysterious unknowned murderer tht goes by Red John. But I'd like to see what you come up with BUMP
I loooooooooove the mentalist! Anyway i love the story and the detail. If ya need any help or ideas you know who to pm