This story is worth staying for on a school night. First of all, perfect grammer and spelling. I saw what you did there with the 'haft' instead of 'have'. Second, classic storyline. The twist: no romance. I love this combination. In my opinion, i think romance is a bit too overused. I can totally imagine this as a CSI episode or something. I noticed a bit of foreshadowing in your writing. Love it. Keep up the fantastic job and get well from the food poisoning soon. That's what you get for eating that cake batter! And on your updates, please take your time. I'm sure you're a busy person and you have a life beyond Pimd. I hope your readers will understand its all about quality, not quantity!
I woke up, and was lying down in a metal type structure. It was a wide space, and I could hear water leaking from a crevice somewhere. I sat up slowly, looking around. It was moderately lit, and there was a metal door at the front. I heard it creak open as somebody walked in hastily and grabbed my arm roughly pulling me forward. It was a strong man, he towered above me at about 6'6". I couldn't see his face for he was wearing a mask of some sort. But I wasn't expecting some kind of pretty boy with his build. He had a pistol in his holster on his right side, and it was probably a Desert Eagle style pistol. His grip on me was strong, and I was weak at the very moment. I couldn't quite tell where he was taking me. I couldn't really tell where I was at either. All I knew is it couldn't be anywhere nice. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sorry for the shortness!