Another interesting problem. I agree with Andi..Chelsea should have had a girl best friend. And possibly the best friend could've liked Rick. Blump.
Again I say, madam
Interesting indeed. I find it slightly fanciful that they're all so...flawless. I think it appeals to the female mind that yearns for a kind, selfless, romantic gentleman who's so dedicated to the woman he loves regardless of trials and tribulations... Yet, the love story filled with twists and turns that try to leave unpredictable endings is a confusing thing. Don't get me wrong, I want a Rick of my own, and I want to be loved by other guys...yet the naïvety of this supposedly plain girl is monumental. Her FRIEND totally and completely shattered her heart. It wasn't even love or a romance, more like a fling. Then we further complicate the plot by throwing in a wayward stalker brother with an interesting past with the girl whom is then defeated easily by his 'conflicted' brother. And then we have the whores Nash and Regina. Nash apparently was engaged with Rick and never had sex with him. And then she comes off as sweet when all she wants is Rick, then she lies about being preggo, and BAM! disappears. Regina, on the other hand, is reformed by the perfect straight-arrow, potential stalker Dale. It seems to be a soap opera up in here. I find it difficult to believe everyone is beautiful and perfect around her when Chelsea is in fact a plain white wall. I think this story's near it's end. I enjoyed spending around 4-5 hours surfing through spam and skimming paragraphs because there was too much spam. Very...pleasing to its target audience. Though I do think flaws could be more prominent, and that you could probably do more with the currently dull characters with one main train of thought, I enjoyed the concept and the way you put it together.
It really touched me that you spent 4-5 hours to read my story and that you spent time to write a long, meaningful feedback like that. Honestly, I can't express my deepest gratitude for that. Thank you very much, Happiness_Sadness. And the fact that an awesome and amazing writer like you read my story? I feel extremely honored. And I want to thank everybody in general for reading my story. It means a lot.
It's no problem, Eliza. I enjoyed it very much. And you flatter me. I couldn't make anything that could stick around and that flows as well as yours does .
I love it! Go right ahead and expose Nash, Rick.
Its funny to me how they said exactly wat they did when she told them that someone might hear them . And i agree chelsea should have a girl friend shes been so involved with Rick though i doubt shes gotten to know any other girl. Wat is Nash's problem though wat did rick do to her?
That is the longest comment i have ever wrote! BTW This is my favorite story on the FanFiction Forums!! IT'S THE BEST
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