Jake sat there, The water was pouring down on his head. Fletch looked at him. "Its time." They both rose and fletch fitted his hidden blades on jake. "Goodluck jake." Fletch sank to his knees and bowed his head. Jake Drew his sword and brought it down, slicing off his head. Alex walked out. "Lets go." she whispered and the sunk back into the darkness. "Goodbye fletcher."
Jake sat there, The water was pouring down on his head. Fletch looked at him. "Its time." They both rose and fletch fitted his hidden blades on jake. "Goodluck jake." Fletch sank to his knees and bowed his head. Jake Drew his sword and brought it down, slicing off his head. Alex walked out. "Lets go." she whispered and the sunk back into the darkness. "Goodbye fletcher."
"Alex sh!" jake whispered as two guards walked below them. As they stopped below them jake dropped from the rafter and pierced ther haeds with the blades. "I win." jake said as he ran on.
This is good. You just need to remember to capitalize proper names. (I know, I'm a pain. But it makes the story better.)