Its good! I would say a bit contradicting though. Connor is a gangstAr and lives in the poor side of town but hes driving a porshe and ruby is a cheerleader which u said before with a flat and tonef stomach but now she is emabarassed and wears hoodies? I feel like besides that it is a very good and interesting story hope you have a good climax!! Cant wait to see how this ends
Ok Alex. It is not at all contradicting. Criminal organised gangs make alot of money but gangs are based in poor deprived areas. Ruby has a toned body but she's self conscious because when she was younger she was overweight and bullied for it. As she reached adolescence her body changed and she lost weight. Understand now?
"ruby?" natalies voice once again came through the curtain "yeah?" I mumbled smiling still looking at my reflection "can I come in? Or are you coming out?" "I'll come out" I turned around facing the curtain, I pulled it back and stepped out to see 3 faces. Natalies, scarletts and damiens. "what are you doing here?" I said holding my stomach breathing in deeply "I am your boyfriend ruby..... I'm allowed to see you ain't I?" he said looking into my eyes "yeah.... But arn't you mad at me?" "a little but not much" he said stepping towards me opening his arms "you look stunning now gimmie a hug" I smiled widely and stepped into his warm embrace. I lived for damiens hugs but this time it just didn't feel right.
I grasped the steering wheel tightly as I pulled into my parking space at school. Conner was here, I had seen the bright flash of yellow as I drove past the school entrance. Ofcourse mr new guy was allowed to park where other students couldn't. He was 'new' and 'unaccustomed' to the school layout. Pfft. New and unaccustomed my ass. He knew his way round alright, i mean he'd been stalking me for the past 2 days and to be Frank I'd had enough. Yeah we'd kissed, so what. It was one little kiss and nothing more would come of it. I opened my door and climbed out sniffing the cool autumn air surrounding me. I looked over towards the forest and saw a magnitude of colours almost dance before my eyes swaying in the breeze. I shut the car door, locked it and pulled my coat closer around me trying to keep as much heat surrounding me as possible. It was hard work especially as this was our coldest autumn since records had began. I started making my way towards the school entrance looking wildly around the car park for familiar faces to smile and say hello to but there was no one. I checked my phone clock and realised I was half hour early "dammit not again" I mumbled to myself. Molly must have been playing with my alarm clock and set it forward an hour making me earlier for school then I should be "ah well, no harm in going to the library to do some revision is there?" I said to myself as I set off walking towards the library. Recently I had been talking to myself alot. I guess it was loneliness kicking in, I wasn't the sort of girl who likes to be alone you see. But I do like to be alone when I'm upset. I pushed hard on the library door making it squeak loudly as I crept inside "hello?" I called out expecting a reply. None was heard. I smiled to myself Finally, I can revise in peace and quiet. I found a nice spot in the middle of the library with a desk all to myself. I pulled out my English textbook and started my William Shakespeare revision. "ruby?" I heard a voice call out quietly I held my breath and turned around to see conner staring right at me, I tapped my pen impatiently on the desk "what do you want?" I spat at him He laughed and took a seat at the desk next to me "to talk about what happened last week" "good I want to talk about that too." I snapped at him "well..." Conner paused "ruby you're very attractive and everything and I really want to kiss you again" "not gonna happen" I laughed cruely at him, standing up and starting to gather my books trying to get furthest away from conner as possible "why not?" Conners palm wrapped gently around my wrist "because I have a boyfriend" Conner stood up angrily "you mean that whimp you call Damien?!" "yes" Conner laughed loudly "cmon baby leave him for me, I'll show you a good time" he walked towards me holding me tightly by the waist. I did what anybody would do in that situation. I slapped him hard right across the face using the full force of my nails. He coiled back in shock "YOU..." he shouted holding his hand to his face "goodbye conner" I said sauntering off towards the library door very pleased with myself.