Your writing style captivates me. D: That's a very rare thing, I might add. Your stories are a gripping read and I'm always lured into the story when I continue to analyze the paragraphs. Nowadays, stories just bore me. But you, Roybutt, sir, have given me hope that not all stories will suck as badly as Twilight in the near future. Now... MOAR.
Thanks! I do try to write stories people will enjoy. And Qin, I knew you wouldn't like how I did it!
I'll have to agree with Qin on her last post. It seems as if you're rushing it a bit. Just the part where you're describing her appearance, though. Other than that it's fine.
I tried to leave out some aspects of her appearance, like exact height and weight because I find them unnecessary. Describing her like that (in a diary entry) appealed to me because I thought it nice to reveal to the audience a bit of what Amelia is like, inside and out. Of course, description isn't my strongest point so I can understand if I didn't take my time on it.
Oh hey! I stumbled upon yet another great story. You sir, are a fantastic author, along with a few others on FF. I found it stunning that you chose the main character to be a female. When I first read I was " Oh my gosh!..a poor lil boy alone, no where to run" But then as I kept getting near the last bit of your "diary entry" I was stunned. Most authors stick to their original gender while writing a story. Makes it a bit easier for them, I think. Anywho, the story was great! I like the the descriptiveness of this story. :3 It makes me feel like I'm there, in the story itself, but ghost version. Blump.