Be Realistic.

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012.

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  1. >:3 YEAH- I LOVETT! See what I did there?
     
    #21 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  2. I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE/
     
    #22 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  3. Ish so clever-
     
    #23 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  4. ^^ Hell yes.
     
    #24 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  5. I'm arguing with you-
     
    #25 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  6. She snickered, and parked the car in the driving lot. Lot C, row three to be specific. I awkwardly looked down, only to see Sweeny already sitting alone.

    My mom hit my shoulder, and Sweeny looked up.
    "Go get 'em, Mel!" she grinned, sort of shoving me forward. I cringed, looking back at my mother.
    "M-Mom not cool-" I whined, clinging to her arm.
    "Melodie, you're not six anymore. You don't need to hold my hand.
    I saw a small smile on Sweeny's face, and I could feel my own burning with heat.
    She signed me in quickly, giving me a wink before leaving the camp area. I awkwardly sat next to Sweeny, holding the small number and group I was in.

    I was quite the snoop to look at his number. Group Green, number three. Mine? Group Green, number four. Could you have put us any farther apart? Good gracious and the weird crap that happens...

    I awkwardly stood in line, clawing at my dress. I could hear my mom's words pushing forward from the dark place I put them in, in the back of my head. Insert FML.

    I was constantly afraid to trip over my own non-graceful feet, walking steadily to not fall or fuck up.

    I was shaking, and when our group finally got to the assigned room, I had buckled knees.

    We were in the dance room. The room I performed in, once. Ballerina disaster got me to stop dancing forever...
     
    #26 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  7. >:D
     
    #27 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  8. *"
    Blasted quotation marks.
     
    #28 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  9. I guess I'll do an update. I caved in- I'll be doing Sweeney's POV.
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    I walked with my group, keeping my head down. My black tousled hair covering my eyes. All I could see were little patches of grass, and lots of dirt.

    I'd lift my head up now and then, just to make sure I wasn't running into anything. When I'd look up, I'd look at Melodie. Her eyes her the most beautiful shade of green.

    It's just hard for me to be happy... My dearest Nellie committed suicide, and I found out she was in love with me. I always think about how I was one of the reasons she killed herself.

    I looked up at Melodie again, just to see her face a bright red. I looked up at our little cabin thing. The dance room. My face flushed, and I looked down. Nellie and Melodie danced here together along time ago.
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    Happy, Bekka? *dies*
     
    #29 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  10. Hell to the yes I'm happy. ^^ You didn't ruin it! It's awesome! ;D
     
    #30 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  11. Rah-
     
    #31 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  12. ^^ You did an awesome job, love!
    ^^
     
    #32 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  13. No... I didn't.
     
    #33 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  14. ^^ Yes you did! I just saw one mistake. *a long. That's all I saw. :3 Everything else was perfect.
     
    #34 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  15. Thank you...
     
    #35 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  16. ^.^ Jilly, don't put yourself down. You're a damn good writer! (:)
     
    #36 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  17. Thank you, Bekka...
     
    #37 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  18. :3 I think I'm just going to write a flashback of Melodie's. (;
     
    #38 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
  19. Good idear
     
    #39 Mrs_Nellie_Lovett, Jun 25, 2012
  20. :3 You can update again if you want, ima make this one long. Sorta.
     
    #40 satanictitanicGenny_, Jun 25, 2012
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