Ballroom Kidnapper

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *AngelSweets (01), May 19, 2012.

  1. Ok just cause I feel happy about the last chapter Im going to upload the next 1  though it's short cause I don't want to give away to much
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    Hunter's POV:

    She wasn't in her room, I instantly ran to the room beside her's and I noticed the window opened. I quickly ran to it and looked outside. It was raining but I could make out that the bedding from the bed had been made into a rope which Faith had just finished climbing. Beside her was our butler who I was guessing, is helping her out.
    "Faith" I yelled, she looked up at me.
    "Wait for me, I'm coming ok" I yelled.
    She look over at the butler and she must have asked him if I could be trusted. Finally, she turned back to me.
    "Ok, but hurry" she yelled. Then I took off to my room and put a shirt and some pants on, finally I grabbed the bag of stuff my mother had told me to pack. Checking the time, it was 11:23, we had until midnight to escape. Running back to the window, I started climbing out. Finally I was out the window, and I started climbing down the rope. When I reached the ground, me and Faith ran to the car, the butler got in to and started driving.
    "Are you ok?" I asked Faith, wrapping my arms around her, she put her arms around me and put her head to my chest.
    "Did you know about me and Kathy" she asked.
    "She just told me today, after breakfast, she also told me that Roger was planning on taking us somewhere tonight, and that we should leave before 12:00" I said. Then I looked out the window, but I couldn't see anything because it's nighttime and it's still storming.
    "Hey butler, where are we going" I asked him. He didn't answer, instead he kept driving.
    "Butler, where are we goi-" but before I could finished, he stopped the car suddenly. He turned around and looked at us.
    "I'm so sorry kids" he said. Then suddenly someone opened the doors up. One pulled me out and the other pulled Faith out. I started fighting mine, but he was stronger then me and finally he knocked me out. The last thing I remember is Faith calling my name.

    Kathy's POV:

    When I woke up, both my hands and feet were tied to a chair and me eyes were blindfolded. I could hear people moving around me. I came to a guess that their were 3 guys around me, I think one may have a gun. Then I heard Roger's voice, he was talking to someone.
    "Good, you got them, bring them in" he said. Then I heard footsteps come near me. I felt his breathe on my ear.
    "If you would just have did what I said, I wouldn't have to do this to you, but you seem have decided that your daughters life means so much better then yours. Then he pulled my hair, making me lean my head back. I heard the sound of a metal door being opened, people walking in and then silence. Suddenly someone ripped off my blindfold and the sight in front of me, made my heart stop.
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    Ok people tell me what you think, do you think its to much, do you think it sucks or do you think its good 
     
  2. It's really good  but let's see some more action!
     Bump
     
  3. Bump right now
     
  4. Kathy's POV:

    Two men were in front of me. One holding a knocked out Hunter and the second one holding a scared-looking Faith. The one holding Hunter, picked him up and put him in a chair beside me. Then after they tied Hunter up, they went over and stood guard by the door. I started looking around the building, wondering which building this is. I couldn't tell cause I was knocked put during the ride here, but maybe Hunter could. I turned toward Hunter, who was just starting to wake up.

    Hunter's POV:

    I blinked once then twice, trying to focus my vision. Finally, when it cleared, I looked around. I recognized it, it was the warehouse my dad used to torture people or kill people. The walls were completely soundproof. I turned to my right, to see my mom next to me tied up. Its then did I realized I'm tied up too. Faith was standing in front of us. She was shaking and looking around. I started feeling the rope used to tie me down, I recognized the knot instantly. I quickly went to work on trying to untie it.

    Roger's POV:

    I watched them all. I couldn't believe my planned work. All of them are fools, thinking they could outsmart me. I even laughed at the thought of them escaping. I looked at Faith who was shaking of fear. Kathy was looking around the place, as if she'd just find a way to escape. Hunter was trying to untie the rope, little did he know their were 3 guns pointed at his head, ready to shot. I walked over to him and whispered in his ear.
    "The minute you untie that rope, that bullet will go straight in you head" I said.
    He froze, while I just laughed. Then I walked in front of them, my grin never leaving my face. I started clapping for them.
    "I have to say, you guys really impressed me, about how stupid you are to fall for my plan" I said still clapping.
    "I mean come on Faith, how stupid could you be to trust the butler, and Kathy if you would have never hit me, you wouldn't be in this situation." I said starring at her.
    "Oh and Hunter, you had to follow the girl right? You had a chance to save both of you, but I guess you never suspected the butler did you?" I said laughing in his face. Finally I pulled out the gun, it was a M1911A1 pistol.
    "Ok Faith, you either give me your ballroom and 1Billion dollars or I shot them" I said. She gasp, surprised at this.
    "Can't I just give you the ballroom" She said.
    "Yes, she could just give me the ballroom" I said, cocking my head to the side. She instantly relaxed.
    "But if you do, just give me that ballroom, I'll only kill one of them, the other one can leave." I said, smiling at myself. Faith eyes begin to water, tears rolled down her face.
    "I don't h-have the money" She said, putting her head down.
    "Ok" I said, then I aimed the guy at Hunter. I looked at Faith.
    "You either give me the money in a check or I kill Hunter" I said. More tears rolled down her check.
    "I don't have the money, please don't kill him, give me time please" she said. I put my finger on the trigger and put the gun between Hunter's eyes then...
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    :0 What gonna happened to Hunter? Is he gonna shot him?!? Find out next time ;D
     
  5. IMPORTANT MESSAGE: Im going to camp tomorrow and last for a week and guess what I cant bring my Ipod :( which mean if I dont update tonight please dont be mad at me blame the camp but i will try to update tonight ;D
     
  6. BUMPPPPPP
     
  7. Yippy u ve updated  bumpz
     
  8. Roger's POV:

    I pointed the gun between Hunter's eyes and then before I could pull the trigger, bullets hit the window. I instantly ducked, but the rest of my men got shot, I took off running to the exit closes to me. When I found it I ran to the hidden car on the side of the warehouse. Once I got in, I took off to the house, cussing on my way there.

    Faith's POV:

    As soon as the bullets started flying, I had fell to the floor. When they stopped, I didn't waste no time untying my mom and Hunter. When they were untied, we took off running, when we got outside, at least 20 guns were pointed at us.
     
  9. Ok people trust me I know better then you guys that, that chapter sucked but I have to go to camp I hope you like it though 
     
  10. I loved it just a little short :)
     
  11. Hey do you guys think I should finish this story, It kind of sucks 