Ballroom Kidnapper

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *AngelSweets (01), May 19, 2012.

  1. What about Faith's mom is actually alive but kidnapped?
     
  2. Faith mom died srry if i didnt say that
     
  3. Im liking this story
     
  4. Im so srry i havnt been updating school is getting in the way they gave us homework on the last 2 weeks of school i mean what the hell but im workin on next update soon 
     
  5. @princess
    Your story is great



    Btw.....

    I finished the first story in my smash up and started the second...here's an over view of who the second part character are:

    (Lavender Karis- 13 year old girl whose best friend doesn't believe her so she is running away

    Tracey Karis- Lavender's sister who tries to talk lave out of running away. She also loves Ari Hernandez


    Ari Hernandez- Dania's older brother who makes no sense sometimes


    Maximum Hernandez (Max Hernandez for short)- Dania's older sister who tries to make Dania forgive Lavender but it fails

    Dania Hernandez- Lavender's arche enemy since 3rd grade

    Owen Mircron- Lavender's best friend, he tries to make lave see resin but fails. Wants to run away with Lave but ends up not doing so. He also doesn't believe lavender when she told him that lave loves him.
     
  6. Ok peps the reason i havnt been updating is b/c im movin right at the moment but dont worry ive been writing while ive been on the road so as soon as we get a house ill update ok ok 
     
  7. Faith's POV:

    When I awoke I was welcomed with the white walls of the room. I lay there for a few minutes trying to think if a plan to get out of here but I couldn't come up with anything. Getting frustrated, I threw back the covers and pecked out the door, listening for any sounds that might indicate anyone up. After waiting a few minutes I tip-toed into the hallway, softly closing the door behind me. Moving toward the staircase, I slowly started walking down it, thankful that it was carpet instead of wood. Once I reached the bottom, the smell of pancakes hit my nose, and my stomach growled. Tip-toeing to the kitchen, I pecked around the corner to find Hunter in the kitchen. A sigh of relief escaped my mouth, at the same time he turned away from the oven. I quickly turned back around and put my back straight against the wall.
    "I saw you Faith, no need to hide" he said. I stepped out from behind the wall and gave him a small smile, suddenly feeling insecure about my sweatpants and t-shirt that he lend me.
    "Good morning" I said, my voice coming out a little hesitant.
    "Good morning, did you sleep good?" He asked.
    "I slept fine and you?" I asked, taking a seat in a chair by the table.
    "Go-" He started to say but was interrupted by a beautiful lady walking in.
    "Are those pancakes I smell?" she asked Hunter, then she turned to face me and as she did a memory came to me. It had my dad yelling at a lady who I had expected was my mother.
    "Why would you do this to us? We have a child! Are you willing to leave her for another man? Are you serious?" My dad yelled.
    The mom went up to my dad and slapped him.
    "At least he doesn't yell at me like you do, he actually shows me respect" She yelled back and him. Then she turned and ran out the door, slamming the door behind her. My dad turned to me.
    "Say goodbye to your mother honey" Then he busted out crying.
    I felt a hand on my shoulder and I turned my head to see Hunter beside me.
    "Are you ok?" he asked, concern in his voice.
    Its then I realized I'm crying.
    "I'm fine" I say. Then I whip my tears away and focus on the lady behind him.
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    Helloo my people (if your still with me) sorry about the wait I hate moving but hopeful your still with me just ask it you have any questions 
     
  8. Names Incase you get confused:
    Faith- Main Character
    Hunter- The son of the kidnapper
    Roger- The kidnapper who wants the ballroom
    Kathy- Hunter's mom and Roger's wife
     
  9. Kathy POV:

    I watched as she stared at me witt tears running down her face. My heart beat started getting faster as I tried to keep my face blank with no hidden emotion. Hunter was now by her side, asking if she's ok. She said something to him then she focused on me. Giving her the best smile I could make up, I walk up to her.
    "Hi, I'm Hunter's mom, Kathy" I said, smiling brightly and sticking my hand out. At first she just looked at me, then she shook my hand.
    "Hello, I'm Faith" she replayed. I took a breathe of air trying to control my breathing and gave her another smile before turing toward Hunter.
    "Hunter, now what is this lovely girl doing in our house? Is this your girlfriend?" I asked him, pretending I didn't now her as Roger told me too.
    Hunter turned bright red, he looked at Faith then back at me.
    "No, did dad not tell you why she is here?" He asked looking bewildered.
    "All he told me was that there was a girl staying with us, but you don't need to answer the question if you don't want to." I gave him a wink and started making coffee.

    Faith's POV:

    I was still blushing from what Hunter's mom had asked. I watched as the two of them fighted with each other with dishrags. I remained at the table, loss at thought.
    "Don't they look cute together" Roger asked, appearing beside me. I stop breathing and didn't answer. Roger grinned at this and then he walked inside the kitchen. While they were all in the kitchen, I took the chance to compare all of them. All of them had black hair and blue eyes.
    "Faith, how many pancakes do you want?" Hunter asked.
    "I'm not hungry" I answered.
    "Aww, come on, my pancakes are the best" He said while pouting. His mom snorted. I laughed as Hunter asked her what she thought of his pancakes and she told him they kindof sucked. Roger just stood at the end of the kitchen watching them with a smirk as if he was planning something. Finally after Hunter and his mom stopped arguing, I agreed that I would taste Hunter's pancakes. So we all sat at the table as if we were some kind of loving family. After a while of eating, I manged to gather up enough courage to ask Hunter's mom something.
    "So Hunter's mom" I started awkwardly.
    "Oh dear, please call me Kathy" She said.
    "Ok Kathy, were you ever married before" I asked, trying to keep my voice even and my head down.
    "Yes, I have sweetheart, now may I ask the reasons behind your question?" she asked, wipping her mouth and looking at me.
    "Well, I-i was thinking that your very pretty and so you must have been married before" I answered, giving her a fake smile and trying not to blush at how stupid I sounded.
    "Well, thank you dear" she said smiling back. Both Hunter and Roger were looking at me curiously.

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    Yea I know this chapter kindof sucked but hey Im trying people ill try to make the next 1 more awesome hope you guys like it 
     
  10. Bumpz  nice update  been waiting for it
     
  11. It's awesome update!!
     
  12. Omfg I was about to upload 1 of the best chapters and my ipod died so it might take me awhile to get a new chapter 
     
  13. Faith's POV:

    As soon as breakfast was finished, I ran to my room, locked the door and started crying. I can't believe she left me. My dad lied to me. She left me for my dad's worst enemy. If she's Hunter's mom then that means me and Hunter can't be together either. I started crying even harder, using my pillow to muffle the sounds, so no one could here. Soon after I heard a soft knock, I had stopped crying by now, but you could still tell I was crying.
    "Go away" I said, hoping that person wasn't Hunter.
    "Faith, I know you've been crying and I have to talk to you, please open the door." It was Kathy, just thinking about her brung tears to my eyes, but I got up and opened the door anyway. She walked in and locked the door behind her and she sat on the bed, I followed after her and sat beside her, keeping my head down.

    Kathy's POV:

    As soon as I sat down my heart started to break at what I was about to say to her. I hated lying to her about this, but Roger had told me what would happen if I didn't so I had no choice.
    "Im guessing, you want to know the truth about what happened?" I asked, keeping my face as blank as possible. She looked up at me and slowly shook her head.
    "Well when me and your dad got married, I was young and stupid, and I only married him because of his money" I heard her gasp and I closed my eyes, scared of her expression.
    "When I had you, we didn't know what to do, I didn't plan on having a child, but your father loved you instantly, so I sucked it up for him, but one day, while I was on a business trip, I met a man, and I fell in love with him" I paused and glanced at her, new tears were running down her face now and I felt tears come to my eyes but blinked them back and continued the story.
    "I didn't want to go behind your father's back, so I left" I said taking a deep breath and waiting for her to say something. Then she asked the question I had hoped so badly she wouldn't ask.
    "So-o I'm a m-mistake? You didn't want m-me?"She asked, her voice trembling and more tears rolling down her face. I turned my head, so she wouldn't see the tears forming in my eyes.
    "Yes" I said, then I got up and left. As soon as I left, I ran to my room, shut the door and sat on my bed. Then I cried, I let it all out, mu shoulders wee shaking and I felt like I was going to die, so much emotionally pain running throught me. I felt a hand on my shoulders, I just kept crying.
    "Good job sweetheart, you manged to make the girl an easier target" Roger whispered in my ear. I turned around, pushing his hand off of me.
    "What the world is wrong with you? Your hurting me and my daughter, the only reasons I'm with you is because you promised me you would leave her and her dad alone!" I yelled at him, pushing him away from me. He grabbed my wrist and brought me to him.
    "Don't you dare talk to me like that or I will kill you, you know I can" he whispered in my ear.
    "Oh yeah right Roger, you can't even hurt a fly" I told him, then I kneed him, but before I could reach the door, I felt his fist hit me, Causing my to fall on the floor and then everything went black.

    Hunter's POV:

    I heard my mom fall to the floor, then I quickly removed my ear from the door and ran to Faith's room. I had to get her out of her, before my mom went to talk to Faith, she told me if anything happened I had to save Faith. When I got to her room, she was gone.
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    Hows that for an awesome chapter :D Who knew Roger could be so evil :0 and what will happen to Faith's mom? And what happen to Faith? Find out next time 