~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~ "What the heck?" I looked over. Ugh! I had set my alarm clock. Then, I forgot "It's Saturday! I have my "date" with Cameron!" I jumped out of bed and looked at my alarm clock. 12:00! I must have set it wrong. I went to my closet and picked out my outfit I was gonna wear tonight. I picked my pink flowing blouse, my black ripped skinny jeans, and my new bright pink converses. He didn't say wether we'd swim or not, so I grabbed a small blue shoulder purse, and put my black and green poke-a-dotted bikini in there. I picked it all up and ran to the bathroom. I looked at the clock on the wall 12:45. I still had plenty of time. I got out all my makeup, my curling iron, my toothbrush and toothpaste. I jumped into the shower. I took about maybe 15 minutes. I got out of the shower and dried off. Realizing I forgot my bra I yelled "Mom!" "Yes honey?" she asked. "I forgot my bra on my bed. Can you please bring it to me?" I asked. "Sure. I'll be there in a second." A few minutes later I heard a knock on the bathroom door, and my mom said "It's me." I opened the door and grabbed my bra. "Thanks mom." and closed the door. I pulled on my bra, then my shirt, and tugged on my jeans. "Dang it! Forgot my socks too! Oh well, I get then when I'm done." I plugged in my blow dyer and dried my hair out. A few minutes later there was a knock on the door again. "Almost done in there?" it was mom. "Almost. I guess. Why?" I asked. "Oh no reason. You've just been in there a while. Going anywhere?" she asked. "Um, yeah. I was invited to a party at the beach. Cameron asked me. He'll be here at 8 to pick me up." "He knows where you live?" she asked confused. "Yeah. The other day when it was raining he bought me home." And then kissed me I thought to myself. "Oh. That was sweet of him. Well, carry on." I plugged in my curling iron, and waited for it to heat up. While, waiting on it I put my makeup on. Finally, when my curling iron was heated, I started on my hair, until I thought it was perfect enough. I pulled my hair back into a pony-tail letting my bangs hang loose. A ran back to my room, put on my socks and shoes, picked up my phone and purse. I looked at the clock 7:45. I did good I thought to myself. I walked to the living room and asked my mom "How do I look?" "Oh honey!" It looked like she was about to cry. "You look amazing!" I laughed "Thanks mom." I looked at the time on my phone. 7:57. "He'll be here in the next few minutes. I'm gonna go wait for him outside." I said. "Okay honey. I'll see you later tonight. Have fun!" With that I shoved my phone in my purse and walked out the door. He pulled up in my driveway at actually 8. I opened the door and climbed into the Commander. He smiled and said "Hey. You look great." "Thanks. You too." I said. I examined him. I noticed something different. He wasn't wearing a ball cap. I could see his eyes. They were the lightest shade of blue I've ever seen. He must of noticed I was staring at his eyes because he shook his hair over his eyes. He looked at me again and smiled "Ready to go?" "Ready." I said smiling. Before, we pulled out of my driveway he looked at me, leaned in, and kissed me. I wanted to pull him closer, but I couldn't. We made our way to the beach. It was packed full of people. We made our way to one clear spot on the beach. I didn't even realize he had a basket in his hands, until he pulled at blanket out of it, and laid it on the beach floor. I finally realized what it was. He was bringing me to a picnic. I guessed right. We had a picnic, shared a couple of kisses. Then, we headed towards the rest of the party. When the party died down we went back to our spot on the beach. He took his shirt off. I was stunned. He was perfect. I smiled at him. He said "You wouldn't of happened to bring a swim suit would you?" I smiled "As a matter of fact I did bring one." He walked with me to the ladies room, and waited outside the door, so I could change. I tugged off my clothes and folded them up. I pulled on my bikini, and examined myself in the mirror. I pulled my hair out of my pony-tail and fluffed it up. As I walked out of the bathroom Cameron stood there and said "Wow." I laughed "What?" "I know for a fact that your the prettiest girl here." I almost fainted. I started to blush badly. "Thanks." We made our way into the water. It was cold at first, but I got use to it away a while. Next thing I knew Cameron had picked my up and wrapped his arms around my waste. Automatically I wrapped my legs and his waste, and my arms around his neck. He looked at me and smiled. He brushed my hair out of my face, and kissed me. Out of all the kisses we've shared I believe this one was the best. After, a few more hours at the beach he took me home. I was exhausted. Before, I walked inside he kissed me and said "Angel. Can I ask you something?" "Sure. What is it?" I asked. "Are we you know...together now...?" he asked. "Yeah. I guess we are." I said. He smiled at me and I smiled back. Before I left I kissed him and said "Goodnight Cameron." "Goodnight Angel. See you Monday." ~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~ I woke up Monday morning to the sound of my alarm clock going off. Yay, I thought to myself, another wonderful day of school. I got out of bed and went straight to my closet. I picked out a pair of ripped skinny jean, a blue greenish flowing blouse, and my blue high heels, then I made my way towards the bathroom. I started my shower. Before, I got inside the shower I pulled out my make-up and curling iron. I hopped in the shower. After a few minutes I got out and put on my clothes, and pulled put my hair dyer. I started to dry my hair, and there was a knock on the bathroom door. I turned my hair dyer off, and opened the door. It was my mom. "Hey honey. Up already?" "Already?" I asked confused. I looked at my clock. I had woken up an hour early. How did I not notice? "Sorry mom. I must of did something to my alarm clock." "Oh, honey it's perfectly okay. I just didn't know why you were up so early." I laughed and kissed my mom's forehead. "You can go back to bed if you want." "No, honey, I'll be fine. I start making breakfast. How does eggs, bacon, and pancakes sound?" My stomach growled "It sounds delicious!" I finished up my hair and did the rest of my make-up. When I left the bathroom I went straight to my room, and check my phone. Shit! 15% left. I'll have to charge it, so I hooked it up to my charger. I walked over to my closet and got out a shoulder length purse to match my outfit, and tossed it on the bed, and left out. By the time I made it to the kitchen I was starving. I looked at my plate and said "Wow mom. Thanks." She smiled. I began to ate. It was the best breakfast I've had in a long time. When I was finished I brought my plate to the sink and said "Thanks again mom." "Your welcome honey." "Well, I still have a half hour till I need to leave for school, so I'll be in front messing around on my skateboard." "Okay. Please try not to hurt yourself." I laughed. "Sure mom." Before, I went outside I ran back to my room to get my phone. Yes! Fully charged! I grabbed my purse and shoved my phone inside, and then I walked to the front door. Right when I opened the front door Cameron's eyes bulged. "Cameron, what are you doing here?" I smiled. I was happy to see him. "I was coming by to see if you needed a ride to school." I laughed "Sure." I smiled at him and he smiled back. We got outside to his car, and he opened my door for me, and helped me in. Once we were in his eyes locked with mine. I couldn't help but blush. He leaned in and kissed me. Every time he kisses me I get the same feeling. Tingles. Everywhere. I can't do anything to stop it. I like it that way. After a few more stolen kisses we made it to school. He walked me to my locker, and all the girls were just staring at me. He walked me to my first period, and I turned around and noticed some of the other girls following us. Before he left he kissed me one last time and whispered "See you 7th period Angel." ~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~
Reminds me of twilight. Really good story but a bit too romantic, we need a die hard cliff hanger. Sonething to propel the story. But good work ★★★★
Hmm to bubble gum and sweet stuff add mystery to Cameron I was intrigued at the first part where he seemed to not know why he was at the school add hardships to her life everything seems too perfect I guess hardships with creative solutions are always the best haha but good work I love what you've done great job
~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~ After, walking into gym I was suddenly attack by some blonde headed girl. I threw her off me and looked at her. I automatically realized who it was. Captain of the cheerleading squad, Marcie Johnson, also known as The Biggest ***** In School. I looked at her and yelled "What's your problem Marcie?!" "What's with you and Cameron all the sudden?" she screamed back. I honestly didn't think it was any of her business, but I screamed right back with a smirk on my face. "He's my boyfriend *****! So **** off!" Finally, after only a few more words she shut her trap. The day dragged on and on. It seemed like forever, but 7th period finally came. Cameron rushed into school right after me and sat my me. "Hey Angel." I giggled "Hey Cameron." 7th period seemed to be shorter than usual, but I didn't care. Cameron walked me to his car and helped me in. A few minutes later we pulled up at my house. We sat in the driveway the longest time. Finally he asked "Need a ride tomorrow?" I said "Not unless you wanna pick me up again." "See you tomorrow Angel." he kissed my cheek, helped me inside, and drove out of mg driveway. Once I walked inside I ran straight to the bathroom. I lost it. I started crying I controllably. I could stop. I knew why I was crying. I just wanted to stop. I thought myself 'Everyone thinks my life is so perfect! It's not!' I missed my dad. I couldn't face the fact I couldn't get him back. One year ago today my dad was mysteriously murder. Every since then nothing had been the same. I finally stopped crying and walked to the kitchen to get something to eat when there was a knock on the door. 'Wonder who that could be.' I thought. I walked to the front door. No one was there. In the place of where a body should be was dozens on roses. I picked them up and read the note attached with them 'Sorry for the loss.' I dropped the roses right there, slammed the door, and ran to my room. Eventually I fell into a deep sleep. I woke up. 'Man. What time is it?' I thought. '6:00? Had I really slept that long?' I crawled out of bed and went to the kitchen. I could tell mom had been in because she picked up all the roses and put them in a vase. I turned the corner walking to my moms room, and ran right into her. Tears came to my eyes. She held my face in her little frail hands and whispered "Shhh. Honey don't cry. It's gonna be okay." I couldn't even speak. I was chocking on my tears. 'It would be okay' I thought. ~~~~~~~~ ________ ~~~~~~~~
Yayyyyy hardship something to add flavor I love it great job writing keep me posted also here's another idea to help ya out With the roses and the mom, I kinda want to see her be the one breaking down. Something to make your main charatcter stronger and maybe in the end (though I hate to say it) distant from Cameron Or she has a break down and again grows more distant from Cameron