Abnormal.

It's good though.


Since you seem like a good writer, could you give me some kinda (Constructive) critisism (probably spelt that wrong D: ) for my one-shot? I want to improve my one-shots and you seem to know a lot about writing. :3
(Sorry to use this thread to ask.)

 

OHMIGAWD THIS IS TERRIBLE I HATE IT.

But seriously. It's good.

Rani, it's spelled criticism

 

Thanks.