A rap By Bree ( trying my best)

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*breebreenum1 (01)

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Pervs Everywhere


Ahh I'm paranoid Got pervs on my trail every turn I take A I ain't ur victim boy got my phone on alert every text I get
9-1-1 I'll call for u if u ever get 100 feet close to me Ahh got my lawyer on speed dial phone always there for me yeah
Ohh o BRB I'll say before can start to sext me TTYL better change that to TTYN.... Meaning now
Ahh now did I tell u got this phobia in ma head that driving me crazy under ma bed with my laptop and some pancakes
Aaa now it 2 Its the morning trying to think but it's uncomfortable hay never gonna come out till 3 pm..... My rap ends here because I really can't think any more lol anyway ttyn means talk to u never if ur wondering.... And I'm ask please don't make fun of the rap please
Amen 
 
Josh shut up

Bree, glad to see another young and up-and-coming rapper emerging  hopefully your skills will improve as you practice 

Just a lil tough time trying to figure out which parts of the rap are rhyming together so perhaps appropriate punctuation or sentence structure can resolve that and u will be on your way 
 
It was good! I write songs/raps/music myself, and my advice to you was already posted by someone else.. I would suggest punctuation/just ending the line. Haha thanks for posting! It was fun to read! 
 
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