Again, as what happens a good amount of the time, the story progresses a bit too fast for me. Kissing a random guy you've only just met isn't something most would do, don't you suppose? Also, if he was born on a boat in the Amazon River, I'm assuming he would be Brazilian. 'River' is an English word but Brazilians speak Portuguese. Just my logic, may be flawed, in that case I do apologize, but in any case, I also don't quite like the fact that she's such an elaborate liar, that struck me as a bit off. But the whole murdering people for her master did intrigue me. Details were a bit murky, but done well enough. Overall not a bad start. I do hope you end up continuing.
She's a weird person, her life has been traumatised by 'Master', he has made her come up with this. As for the title, well a) Amazonian is a word so I didn't make up the ethnicity b) his middle name's river, I had to just clearing that up
I'm a brazilian, and I speak Portuguese, Yes, I should have pointed that out, with the few simple mistakes. Yes, I agree with Happiness_Sadness, but also with yourself. Just research about Brazil, you can find amazing information to help with the stories. Anyway, it's getting good, but just a pointer that the yellow fever is very common in the Amazon and is needed for vaccines. Going pretty nice. DETAILS DETAILS DETAILS! ~Toxic