River's POV I swiftly opened the glass door to the café, Chloe was there, cleaning tables with her little black apron on. "Hey River!" she squealed. "Hi Chloe." for me Chloe was fun and bubbly but far too energetic, in-your-face and tiring. Nevertheless she's a great waitress, funny with the older people, flirty with the younger, bubbly with the kids. I twisted the closed sign over to open and threw on my striped apron. Just as I was about to take a cookie from the jar the bell from the door rung. "Hey Amazonian Boy" I turned round to see a beautiful, smirking girl. Autumn.
Is there gonna be any twist? I love them. Overall, it's satisfying. DETAILS DETAILS DETAILS! ~Toxic °.*•❉༻❣༺༠ི༠ྀ༻❣༺❉•*.°
Cherry, word to tge wise, don't reveal that unlease it's in the story, it removes the mystery and stuff.
It wasn't THAT clear.. She all of a sudden had wings and killed someone. That in no way signifies an 'angel of darkness'..
That wasn't constructive criticism, that was down right rude! If you don't complement or give constructive criticism don't read. And didn't you write that amazing story where she moves in with that guy after her sister hits her and he proposes, with Josh and Ali and gummy sharks?