Ok, so I realize that i said ill update over thanksgiving break, which clearly didnt happen, but, I have started it.One paragraph has been completed.
Mags, I didn't know you wroteI write too.. Except I sort of didn't ever keep mine going ?and now I don't know where it is
:') i love it. this is totally a bedtime story i would tell my kids. give or take a few words :3 BUMP.
finally, Im updating. I don't think I've ever done dialogue before so it may not be too great, but here it goes ?btw, I would love to hear how I can actually make my dialogue work in the future ******************* After waiting for twenty minutes, he finally arrived. He sat onto the orange bean bag and we began to talk. Today I started our conversation. "Have you ever wondered why they make us drink that liquid every night before we go to sleep?" "Surprisingly, no. It tastes good- I've always just accepted it as a dessert. You know, like the milkshakes and smoothies we have in our dreams?" "Hah Hah Ha, I love the mango smoothies and chocolate milkshakes!" "What are you talking about? strawberry trumps all." "You are crazy, no way!" We sat laughing and joking around for another five minutes or so before going back to the topic. I veered us in that direction, saying: "Anyways, so that dessert they make us drink, I want to try and skip it tomorrow. I'm sure they make us drink it for a reason." "Oh yeah? What if it's drunk to keep you alive?" "Puh-lease" "So, how do you plan to not drink it?" "That's your area of expertise" "Hah hah" "But in all seriousness, I'm really not sure. They would notice if I were to just leave a full cup on the table." "Hmm, what about the food? Have you ever payed attention to where it goes after we eat?" "The leftovers?" "Yeah" "I guess it's better to watch all the details and get away than rush and get caught. Lets look for it tomorrow during the meals. I wonder if they just put it in a disposer." "Agreed, meet here tomorrow?" "Mhmm. Oh, I'll leave first today since I got here first." "Alright" We leave at different times so we wouldn't get caught talking. After all, we're different elements, we can not talk or socialize together. With that we ended our chat till the next day. I peeked through a peek hole in the door, saw no one was there and proceeded to go to my room.
Finally! Be careful with capitalization, as there are some mistakes. And all dialogue should have punctuation after it. I'm really so happy you finally updated.