A GOD IN HIGH-SCHOOL

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *alicat1995 (01), Jun 1, 2012.

  1. Don't use a lot of '??????' or '!!!!!!!!' in your stories. .-.

    It makes the character seem like a whining baby. .-.

    And I advise you to do some research on the gods. It seems too... perfect. Aphrodite is the daughter of Zeus... yeah. I'm curious as to where Hera went, though. .-.
     
  2. Actually, it does seems too perfect.


    The character has a very... strange and awkward personality. It seems as though you're trying to make her a tough and mean person, but then give her some kindness. Somewhat contradicting, but the story hasn't even really started, so I can't criticize you for that.

    Although I can already predict what will happen.

    Let me guess. Imperfect, later in the story, meets a boy, falls in love, gets bullied by popular kids, bites back, soon becomes a popular kid—

    ._.

    cough.

    This story does have potential though. Depends on how you use it.
     
  3. Ok thanks:) and well i wanted to change it up a bit. In this world hera is not there. Lol thank you though:)
     
  4. Sure, you're welcome. :3


    Oh, and I advise you to add a few more gods from the Greek mythology in there. Makes it more interesting.
     
  5. Well no actually thats not how it goes and on the before comments you see that I made Adam a promise that I'm not going to make it perfect so yeah :)
     
  6. Ahhhh the comments are out of order sorry!!! Um just move them up one lol
     
  7. Thank you very much!!! I have more gods In the next update:)
     
  8. As long as romance doesn't overflow, high school drama doesn't take over, and action stays prevalent...I am completely fine... Wait, and the character can't be perfect... Ahhh... You know what would make it interesting? If Zeus made her ugly for high school... To learn a life lesson and all that...
     
  9. Lol... XD... It's fun just reading the comments some times lol
     
  10. I think you're mixing up what Adam said.

    Interesting. Your story can't be plain, it needs characters. I don't think have like one popular cheerleader, one hot perfect guy, two gods and one half god will attract much readers. e.e
     
  11. I'm not done introducing characters yet
     
  12. I'm not having that goldilocks so dont pit characters into my story k?
     
  13. nice job [ /i]
    Btw I'm trying to figure out italics…