Mel's Review Station Story: The Oracle's Seer Written by: -_lilCindal-_-CinCin-_ Extra Information: Mythical creatures~ Originality~ A guy discovering something he didn't know existed, travailing the land of mythical beings and experiencing things he long thought were just imaginary. The story already has a great sense of potential and gives you at least one thing to think about. Interest~ The mythical beings at the start are the typical but later on there is one creature that I found most creative and it even spoke Cin's made up language for it. It has the usual story line at the beginning which made me think it was a tad blah but it does show promise with the amount of thought it is shown. Characters~ The character, Hector gives a nice fresh feeling with a go-get-'em attitude which is really effective and makes you think on your feet and makes you want to go into that land yourself. There is also his sister with a cheeky personality adding a nice touch and interesting dialogue. Grammar~ After a ellipsis (...) remember to put a space followed by a capital letter. The foot note was an interesting addition. Try and be consistent when paragraphing so it is easy for readers to follow, either have a whole space between different people speaking or just start a new line. One sentence I saw was a tad long with no full stops, it makes it sound like a carry on. Also check for typos and grammatical issues. Summary Review~ I would recommend it for people fond of fantasy or just want to enjoy something new and quick to read.
Mel's Review Station Story: The Missing Piece Written by: Xx_Sweet_GummyBear_Xx Extra Information: High School Twins. Originality~ A group of high school girls go out for an over night stay in the city, something has been bothering one of the girls though and it's staring to effect the rest. It's a used plot line but does have some new ideas brought in with characters. Interest~ Beautiful and imaginative description of the characters straight off the back, as well as a nicely formatted start to get readers interested. The later description of characters though seemed payed a bit with a chunk of information at once that was delivered simple. It's not to bad but made me lose intreats. The mystery of why Mil is like at bring me back though. Characters~ There is a number of characters, all girls so far but despite their appearance we haven't got to know how they react yet. They all have tried to have something different about themselves but telling the reader isn't enough, showing the reader through dialect is. Grammar~ Not many grammatical errors I saw besides from the start when two different people where talking and you didn't start a new line. The story wasn't really effected a lot by that though. Some sentences where really confusing and hard to figure out so make sure to be clear on the concept when writing the sentence. Summary Review~ If you enjoy high school life, this story being somewhat relatable I suggest reading it as it has easy readable updates.
Haha ya dont have to review your own story cuz that would be silly buuuuttt I just wanted o say again how awesome I thought it was
Haha, well thank you so much anyway Jen. Brooke I'll post your review in around the time spam of one to two days. I seriously apologize for the wait.