Mel's Review Station Story: Perfection ~ The Not So Perfect Story Written by: ashleemac14 Extra Information: Review done after reading up to page 7. Originality~ The story line, first day back at school and meets new guy. Her guy friend being jealous of him. Seen before but it is worth a read if you like or enjoy these types of stories. Interest~ I've seen the story line a lot of times but what makes yours stand out is the good description. I kept reading through out, though sometimes the grammatical errors made me a bit distracted from the main story. Characters~ We all get to know the main two characters almost straight away, the main girl and the boy she bumped into. The writer has put in a good amount of characters so readers will not get bored. Some are the 'typical' characters you would seen in High School stories like the mean girl but it has been portrayed at a good standard. Grammar~ A few typos and one mistake I kept on seeing is when you would put a com or after someone spoke, when it either had a full stop or question mark. Example: "Silly, come on it's going to be fun.", Suzy coaxed her brother. Where it can be put as: "Silly, come on it's going to be fun." Suzy coaxed her brother. Also the placing of , was a little over done, same as the full stops. It's fine to use it for added effect but try not to use it all the time and let the sentence flow on. Summary Review~ For fans of the High School love stories it is for you. It has nice clear short updates but can be generous and give long updates.
Now because of time restraints I can only read up to a certain amount of the story, so I apologize. I'll hopefully be quicker at reviewing now since I know what I am doing. Please if any askers for reviews or people who read them, have any suggestions of what you would like me to write about please just ask.
It's quite alright. I was wondering if you could, of course when you are able to, read The Idle Promise? I know Roy has given me tips to chill my writing down, but I was just wondering if there was anything else that may need fixing, and how it's looking so far ^^ Thank you!
Mel, I love reading your reviews, even if I haven't read the story. You do the best job of any interviewer in pimd fan fiction by far, or at least from what I have seen. You almost make me want to write something new just to have you review it!
Mel's Review Station Story: The Destines Intertwine For You Written by: jennete and Snow Extra Information: Review done after reading page 4. Originality~ Impressive to say the least, although it is another story about student-teacher relationships this one also involves the depth of jealousy, testing of friendships and trust within it. With the addition of these details it makes for a eager read and puts a new spin on the genre. Interest~ The story is one that I wouldn't be fond to read if I first knew what is was about but I was pleasantly surprised at how much I enjoyed it and kept reading. With the challenges put towards the teacher because of his relationship with the student, how should he react to certain situations he found himself and the true test of loyalty brought one a great read. Characters~ They all have reasons to be in the story, a strong connection towards the two main characters. Hunter is the close friend of the student how is curious about why the teacher is so caring from her and starts to worry. The teacher is faced with keeping his emotions hidden, these problems make for interesting plot lines and development of characters. Grammar~ Overall I didn't see many mistakes other then the ones your readers kindly corrected but I did come across the same mistake as I did in another review was the capital letter after a comma when in quotation marks. Example: The Old Man looked fondly at his son and replied, "It didn't have to happen." Where it is corrected to be: The Old Man looked fondly at his son and replied, "it didn't have to happen." Also all 'I's are meant to be capitalized, that is also the rule for words like I'll. A mistake or maybe typo I have seen a little in your story. Summary Review~ This is an excellent and interesting plot line story, with good quantity long updates for people who love to get in a lengthy read.
@Royale. Aw, thanks it means a lot that you enjoy my reviews. Maybe one day I'll be reviewing another interesting book from you.
Mel's Review Station Story: Bloody Mary Written by: -KittyInBunnyland- Extra Information: Delicate and amazing read. Originality~ I've heard and seen quite a few framed killing stories in my life time, the thing what grips me to yours is the closeness I feel towards Mary at a very early start to this story. The emotional sense is written and portrayed well making it a wonderful and breath taking read. Interest~ The thing is...I just had to keep reading every chapter I saw, truly gripping. What a great story should have, the pain of waiting for more is the best feeling in the world. The actions in the telling of this story brought very interesting images to my head. Characters~ There is a lack of description of characters appearance early on but we learn of Mary's soon after that. It is written subtle which gives a nice touch. The emotion and the feelings of Tom and Mary give as a little incite as the why they are doing what they do. Grammar~ Two to three typos over all the three chapters posted at the moment which is an amazing effort and good use of editing. The way this story is formatted is very professional in the way that it is used where needed to highlight various emotions. Summary Review~ Highly recommended because of the brilliant detail and great hook. The chapters are at a nice and easy to read length.
Mel's Review Station Story: The Idle Promise Written by: thateonemerchant-ZacharieTumblr Extra Information: Best romantic story I've read in a while. Originality~ The closet thing I have read to something like this would be Frankenstein, this story mixes horror with a mess up relationship extremely well. The main idea of is, the girl who loves the guy who cuts up human bodies and transforms her to look more beautiful. Is the girl insane for loving him? I mean what more do you want from a good horror story, it has gruesome and passion all in one. Interest~ It came and went throughout the chapters because of the sense of rushing making the sentences confusing and hard to understand sometimes. Even though if this story has some fillers, which is good if done well. The writer did give us some background information on how these two ended up which a enjoyed. Characters~ Brenden or 'B' as she is called by Felix her love interest, has to deal with Felix's quirk in that he cuts up human bodies and modifies others. She has to deal with the question of 'am I insane?' Which brings about a great character turning point, Felix though we don't really know why he is like that. That's what makes me keep reading because I want to find out why he is so cool! Grammar~ There are typos and errors in each chapter but not a lot so it doesn't distracted from the actual story. Try not using 'and' all the time for new sentences because it can get a bit gritty but that is just me. I must applaud you for trying to use BB codes even though they don't always work, it's good to have a try. I'm not even brave enough to try myself cause I'll defiantly stuff it up. Summary Review~ Sincerely recommended for people who enjoy horror stories because this one is done well, also if you enjoy a bit of romance but not over the top this gives a nice spin on the usual girl x boy relationship.
Bloody Mary was great, Sean I'll get on to your review ASAP same as Cin's luckily I have already read yours. Thank you guys for supporting this and a big shout out to everyone who let me review their stories~
Can you review mine? I'd love some critique, I'm not getting too much on mine, but I'm just getting started with it. The Missing Piece If I can get some feedback I'd greatly appreciate it. It's a mystery type and one of the girls murders another, but there are other smaller mysteries in it as well. Thanks! -Paige
Could you check out 'A Promise Worth Keeping' for me? It's only the introduction at the minute, though.
I'll try and get reviews done as quick as I can and thank you for patiently waiting. This is my first time reviewing poetry so some feedback would be greatly received. Mel's Review Station Poem: Sean's Poem Page Pt.2 Written by: MadFiendSean Extra Information: First time reviewing poetry. Picture~ All I saw was a bright light, a flash at the end of the tunnel as well as showing figures representing the sinister humans. Being such a short poem it doesn't give much away but the message was reasonably clear. Interest~ It's short, concise and relatable. It was easy and nice to read making myself think about a few things that have happened in life. The wording does make for an easy to understand and picture read. Theme~ For the theme as the title gives it away is 'The Truth of Human Nature' the poem goes through shortly the good and the bad. My thought was that it was about hope and love, your never to dark to not feel other one of them. Grammar~ I'm not too fussed or that knowledgeable about how poems are sort out but I do know it is best to keep any piece of writing neat. Which for the most part it is. Food for thought though, if when starting a new line make sure to keep them all either capital letters or after the first line lower case. One line of the poem I had a little trouble understanding as it doesn't make sense. Summary Review~ Since this is one of the only poems I've really seen on FanFiction I say give it a read! It's mostly understandable and clear even if you aren't big on poems as well as it being nice, short and sweet.