Here's the new update ______________________________ I looked into his beautiful blue eyes and then it happened. My body became stiff and I couldn't move. The searing pain from the fresh wound on my back pulsed as hot, crimson blood bled from it. A little pool of it was at my feet. Christian looked like he had seen a ghost. "W-what's g-going on-n?" I managed to croak out between struggling breaths. Christian called the ambulance to get me to a hospital and quickly. As they placed me on a stretcher, I caught a glimpse of Angelica. Angelica? She was staring at me a violent face, one with hatred defined on every feature of her face. The police suddenly tackled her down, her face in the dirt but still glaring at me. I'll never forget how much she loathed me by the look in her eyes. ______________________________ Was kind of short but it's something!
Sorry it's because of the fact that the story is only in her point of view Angelica originally broke into the house waiting for their return. She plotted this ever since she was broken up with by Christian. She shot Anabelle with a handgun, so now she's going to the hospital because of her bleeding wound and since Christian had called the emergency number, the police came along with ambulance. The police took down Angelica. Did that help clear things up?
Yeah, next time I write a story (if I ever do) I'll have it in different povs of the main characters.
What u could've done, though, is that when she saw Angelica being tackled by the police, a pistol drops out of her hand! Oh boy, that would've been suspenseful! I like action!