Here's feedback. The story's good so far. The updates are kinda short, I can't really understand the story if I'm reading one paragraph every update or so. Reading the start and the second update, I have the feeling this is going to be a cliché. It's a little too lacking in originality, y'know? I may be wrong, that's just how I'm viewing the story as. Second of all, could you put in a little more detail? It's good, but is there more than just Hannah or whatever her name is being eye-candy? You could describe her figure or the setting. It's optional, I guess. I can't say much, considering you just started and the updates aren't really enough for me to give constructive criticism. I'll be expecting more, considering I have high expectations for this. :3 And high expectations from readers are usually a good sign. Tells people they have potential and should show it more. Yep.
There are a few grammar mistakes. It would be nice if it was a little more detailed. You could add depth to the character's feelings. You could put sarcasm or emphasize the story by using italics or bold.
Also, there are a few grammatical mistakes here and there('My best friends name was Josh' should be 'My best friend's name was Josh').
'couldnt' should be 'couldn't'. 'She said "my name is Hannah, Hannah Roberts"' should be 'She said,"My name is Hannah, Hannah Roberts."' Try using more adjectives. For example, 'She winked cutely at me, "My name is Hannah, Hannah Roberts."'