/megafacepalminowknowhowkarkatfeelslike Dear God, this is so pathetic/pitiful and hilarious at the same time. I'm going to screen shot this and show it to my English class and teacher. Just— I can't even—
I'm not even trying to piss off people anymore. I'm just laughing and crying simultaneously. This is painful to my eyes and my laughing gut organ. ,_,
It's not the story that's bad (because it's not). It's the fact that people like you actually don't even understand the concept of punctuation. That's what makes it sad, and even ironic to some extent. :|
Gold, I just wanna ask (seriously, not trying to be mean or whatever) where you feel the punctuation is bad. Could you post some examples? I agree that if they don't get what a period is, they're just being idiots, but I don't see any terrible punctuation, really.
oh okay haha, well yes I do go school, I might not be in the top English class but at-least I try my best in writing stories that would interest people in reading. I'm not mad or angry at anything right now, cause I have bigger problems then this and I can take criticism. Anyways I'll update as soon as I can thanks for posting names on my wall, I appreciate it. Lots of love, riri
Hey at least i can follow her story. So what her puntuation isnt the greatest its a fantasy college GAME! Last i understood as long as you can understand the basis of the story in a GAME it done matter. Not trying to be mean or anything just pointing at that it dont really matter. No one is forcing you to read it so run along now
That's not even what I meant. I'm just shocked you don't know what a period is, doesn't mean you didn't use it. I'm telling you to use it in dialogues more than using a 'comma', that's what I said in the beginning.
-Jordan's Pov- I love her, she's not only my best friend, but she's practically my sister. The only person who will deal with my crap before her own, drop everything and come find me if she thinks something's wrong with my life.So naturally, I do the same thing for her. Which is why I'm here with her right now, feeling the need to kill the guy she's crying over because he's making her cry. If I do that, though, she'd just be even sadder, and honestly, she's really ugly when she cries. It sounds horrible of me to say, but it's the God honest truth, and I'm sticking to it, no matter how depressed she is. "Hey, do you want me to get you something to drink?" I offered, even though it felt weird to be so generous sounding. She shook her head. "I just want you to stay with me" Melissa muttered, laying her head on her bed. Dang, my chance to escape the depressing air that was in this room slipped through my fingers. __________________________ Hey, soooo hope y'all liked it. Thanks for writing your names on my wall, all of you are going to be in it. Sorry, if you don't like who I put you as, y'all see who you are in the next update hopefully. Thanks for reading