Spiked Tears: Preview (Draft 1)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by DoneDeleted, May 17, 2012.

  1. The suitable man stood up big and strong, lean and tall, growing fiercer as everyone breathed the moisture of the air if sweat and tears, "Why must you take my love away from me?"
     
  2.  just sitting here wondering what surprises my amazing character will bring 
     
  3.  oh God sun! I'm almost there, shut your trap! Lol jk  I'm mad at myself for writing so slow lol
     
  4. I stood, unshaken, "Well, young man, you have disturbed a woman at the Sacritum, so you deserve to be punished, and-" The young man, eager to rip me to shreds, ran after me, holding a bat in his hand, charged like an insane bull, savoring the coke red, which for me, I say is odd. Then I jumped up, rode on his back and as he swifted and turned, eager to pull me out of his back and shoulders to cause I'm from not falling, the man stumbled, fell to the floor, with no explanation.
     
  5. Run run!! 
     
  6.  Yeah I thought so sun....run! Run like the wind! 
     
  7. bump! 
    Gah I love this story
     
  8. Love this story
     
  9. Thanks guys  pretty decent work I must say.
     
  10. I stander there, creeping towards the man, seeing him laying there motionless. I felt bad for the man, he didn't deserve death, just a smack in the ass . As I looked around seeing everyone, frightful and hesitant as I was, I noticed that Bryn had got a fish in her hand, ripped to shreds, showing guts, as she stood there, breathing heavily, more than usual.
     
  11. "Uh, Bryn?"I looked at her, bewildered. She plastered a smile, trying to hide face,"Just playing with the regular fish...."She hiked off. Whit yelled," For bloody sake Bryn, you killed the man with a fish, how is it possible?"
     
  12. XD nice sky sky 
     
  13. Bryn smiled, showing every bit of laughter in her pale eyes,"You guys can be serious nut-jobs you know that? I'm Bryn." That made every reason for me to smile, and after a few seconds, her fish had razor sharp spikes in them, filled and covered in blood, leaking on the floor. Aviela hugged Whit closer, which caused Whit to hold her closer, thinking of her as her wife or something. It didn't surprise me, Bryn just unexpected like she is. Eyes of the children cornered the room, little ones gasping and one girl wailing,"Murder!" which caused the uneasy child to get dizzy, and faint , with no hesitation. Oh lord.
     
  14. Great job :)
    Love it  but this fish still has me cracking up 
     
  15.  got some Whit romance later lol
     
  16. The children with dreadful eyes, we're horrified, not knowing any possible good reason why this happened. As I stepped closer, a few of the young stepped back, afraid of what I was gonna do. Bryn sighed, annoyed, feeling like she just had a long say," Children, nothing's wrong, now go back to your studies, and help the little one up."
     
  17.  babe I love your story so much  it makes me laugh and smile and cry...  poor wittle fishy
     
  18. I children nodded, nervous, biting their lips and helping the fragile girl up, trying to explain the situation as best as they could. After a few moments, the young rushed back into the room where their assignments awaited them. Bryn licked her lips,
    "Yeah, if that happens again, I'll totally get fired, just because of my razor fish." Aviela nodded, agreeing in a imploding tone," Ya think?! I'm kinda misguided here, but you just killed the man who had been searching me for years, begging for me to stay with him." And at that instant, the woman's heels clattered as she was ripped of of Whit arms, causing him to shatter, as Aviela hugged Bryn, warmly and forgiving,"We are gonna be good friends."she mumbled into Bryn's blouse as she was enwrapped in the moment. As she caught loose and went back to Whit thanking for his catch from relieving her fall, I smiled, grinning do brightly that Bryn grumbled,"Yeah. Can't wait."
     
  19.  can't wait