I agree. Using emoji makes it look kind of... Tacky. And definitely don't bypass. Try and describe it a bit more to make it more interesting. But it's good. Update
Sorry guys I can't do anymore cause I'm going away for awhile and it's not because of your comments. I appreciate your feedback and next time I won't bypass. And when I said I hate you all I was kidding -> I believe I put that emoji to represent laughter. You guys can continue it yourselves if u want and thx for reading ~Swag